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Patrick BateMEN 09-17-03 11:04 AM

Broken Watches
 
you cant clash with both halves of Patrick BateMEN...Narcicyst not your average...people dont know what time it is but imma let them know...check it....

theres no inventing time/
bend in mine, i'm a troubled mind/
rockin lines like sun dial descriptions/
back and forth letter for letter like pen pal traditions/
pencils with lead in prisons, repeative respect of life is just a shred of wisdom/
catchin pieces of your decapitated head fragments/
head bangers that'll sell stagnit, acting is your source of image/
my souls rationed, i'd trade it within seconds/
but still producin neck crackers like necklaces that are made of biscuits/
embed my visions add up my choices and options/
illuminate the light the day offers/
shockin like stickin forks in sockets/
you couldnt make up for lost time if you covered a misplaced foriegn watch with lipstick and eyeliner/
strike like underpaid workers at high risers..in office spaces/
still slept on like sheets and pillow cases/
if i dont pull your card its cuz i simply deal with aces/
against fascists, numerous forms of haters in races/
try fadin me and your shows end up cancelled like raffles/
where stubs are gone and scrambled/
in a house where things are lost and badly handled/
Pat Batemen the Narcicyst make you fold like wallets, the flame rep/
you making rain checks, keep proppin yourself with the guests/
when you gonna realize that you aint live but fake like hollywood plain wrecks/
yo, its Narcicyst open your optics,Pat BateMEN microphone collosous/
murder your timing like i broke your watches/
close your office to further redefine your skills/
verbal watches i own from the time i've killed....

Alias-C 09-17-03 03:33 PM

it was cool... had some flow and decent vocab....
Kept it pretty energetic... feeling that...
Yo if you wouldn't have mentioned your new alias I wouldn't have known it was u... I say that cause I see the style and content of the verse is a bit different from the ones I'd read from you dawg...
it's still good though...
Yo, why you change your alias? lol... just asking...

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Madd Preacher 09-17-03 03:38 PM

this was aiight...your flow really fucked it up for me right around in this area

catchin pieces of your decapitated head fragments/
head bangers that'll sell stagnit, acting is your source of image/
my souls rationed, i'd trade it within seconds/
but still producin neck crackers like necklaces that are made of biscuits/


ya vocab was coo...nothin that really struck me bout this piece...try to come at a different angle aiight

Patrick BateMEN 09-18-03 10:37 AM

Shukran...Alias i changed my name cuz RB fucked my Narcicyst account, plain to see like aircrafts stallin in ocenas namean....thanks for the replies...uppin...wahid

Baron Mynd 09-18-03 10:47 AM

i thought this was decent, flow stayed on point, some ok vocab, a few good lines "back and forth letter for letter like pen pal traditions" was dope. but aside from that i didnt see anything standout, content was decent, not too original thouigh and that was a bit of a let down for me.

it made for an ok read though, i liked it.

Eace-Pay!

Baron Mynd 09-18-03 10:57 AM

holla:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/for...hp?s=&forumid=9

Genesis_two 09-18-03 06:25 PM

that was iight had ok flow good vocab keep droppin


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