madd tight lines!!!!! multies
 

dis flows for every cat on da block wit NO LOOT/
and if u grew up rich, ya got NO CLUE what i GO THREW/
and if ur broke then u know dis shits SO TRUE/
cause cats that think they know you , dont really KNOW YOU/
knowones tryin to feed you, they after they OWN FOOD/
but SKITTSO./ juss tryin to stack CHIPS YO/ all yall CLICKS KNOW im tryin to exPLAIN AN SHOW/ how to make DougH choppin coCAIN AN DROW/ im aimin high, yall AIMIN LOW/ fuck drugs, im tryin to make dough to enterTAIN AN FLOW//
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QUICK KEYSTYLE . . .HOLLA AT ME IF U REAL
ONE LOVE . . . BY DA WAY . . . DIS FLOW TOOK ME 1 MIN
PEACE

it took you one minute to ABSOLUTELY SUCK!!....dawgs...this piece was horribel...and im bein honest....ya shit was just simple...you need to read more emcees shit and learn how to elevate yaself...cuz duke...this aint cuttin it worth a damn!

This was aight. You're workin on those multi's I see so that is a good thing. That is one of the most important elements in your writing, and even more important if you do audio. Flow seemed to trail off at times but it wasnt completely off.

Dont listen to those heads that say you suck,, chances are they are wacker than you are, and dont know how to recognize skill in the first place.

Just keep workin on your shit man and keep elevatin until you get to where you wanna be.

onE

^ Werdness.

This piece was madd basic, even for a keystyle, the multi's were there but they were Basic two-syllable multi's, the content wasnt anything out of the ordinary, just seemed like words strung together because they rhjymed. Flow was off as i read it, you need more internals, but it was a keystyle, so i cant really critique it.

Elevate.