SS: Twenty Four Seven
 

Ok, this topic struck me as deep for this piece, so consider this verse more poetic than anything else. If you dont get the inner meaning or emotion in it, please, dont vote because its a lot deeper than you'll see on face value. .


Seperate your Rights from Wrongs, Bite the Tongue in Word of Mouth
so Perfect Now, my heart Beats at my ear Drum till ive Heard the Sound.
Satan Lured me down, his rechid cesspit consists of Starship battalions
and semi-warped thought, now Kicking Up Dust like Charging Stallions.
Our Partial Balance of Talent's now Lost and Gallants our Thoughts Be,
Knocked Out of Check, human Domino Effect played At G-Force speed.
The course we Choose to Follow, anchored hope filled Bow and Arrow,
that Relenquishes in the Sentences many kids follow, borrowed Sorrow.
Hollow lead filled Giant, Pencil goliath, shattered oppourtunists window
Spoken downward cycle, etching in vinyl, sketched a pupuluses widow.
we Played second fiddle to the masses of all these second wind fashists
time to Find our Guiding Light against the Flash In The Pan of Average.
Wing span covered in Ashes, Burnt spoken word of the Imperial Lireal
Hysterial material emitted and transmitted throughout Societys Delireal.
if i could just buy me a miracle. A sliver tongued serpent w/ the answers
spoke in thirty stanzas, dirty dancing at death's door, the cure to Cancer.
Just short of Mazda, the blueprint heaven, ruined kingdom shelved now,
Drowned titanic Wave, Magics everywhere these Days, just Spell it out.
Belt around mother natures Face, & so Gracefull the Halo'd serenity sets
see the Sunlight form the glow in her Cheeks, retrace ur steps, better yet
this Letter Quest became a Fettered Test of my Patience im amazed with,
such Blantant Hatred exacuted, im Hated, an Extra to this Essential fluid
Potential's Fluent in life's MainStream, hit Brain Freze by Sentinal Druids.
Its Incoherrent Stupidity only the Foolish can Make Sense, Fake Friends
Make Amends of Mistaked Defense. . and Stand Victorious at Wits End.

Jeez Cam...

That came from your emotions, everything was on point. Your internals were there, vocabulary exceeded standards (like the whole verse) and you just did you..


Lines that caught my eye:

Our Partial Balance of Talent's now Lost and Gallants our Thoughts Be,
Knocked Out of Check, human Domino Effect played At G-Force speed.

if i could just buy me a miracle. A sliver tongued serpent w/ the answers
spoke in thirty stanzas, dirty dancing at death's door, the cure to Cancer.

The whole verse caught my eye, but those are lines that were even doper, I see this is for your SS topic and you definitly came hard. Who ever is against you has one hell of a verse to compete against..

Up. I replied to 8 other poetic pieces yesterday, quit sleeeeeeeeping.

this was nice cam, i liked it, i felt dat shit ~ uhh!!


keep em coming

^ DiE. .

Straight emotions,....the personal aspects in it, .....were nice, ....it flowed well, ....vocab was on a nice level.....

so Perfect Now, my heart Beats at my ear Drum till ive Heard the Sound. :)

Real nice read ....Props :)