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yog_dogg 09-18-03 11:15 PM

Back in jail
 
yo check this

as i sit in my cell
laughing at my self saying what the hell/
how did i land back in jail
how the fuck am i supposed to make bail/
i hate when i get thrown behind bars
the food here is shit, eatin this food out of mothefuckin jars/
ths guards here have no respect, ust cause we have no glock
If they was on my turf they'd get smacked across the block/
they dont know how it was growin up like shit
hell i bet they cant even take a fuckin hit/
i could take all u mothefuckers our wit one punch
Shit! i bet u couldnt make it passed they day wit out lunch/
Fuck this jail i will pray and kneel
you know what, i'm busin out i'm ona break this steel/
Alright enough wit this flow i gotta jet
oh yeah when i get out u a dead man if u dnt pay ur debt/


i'm out...

gotaloveforrap 09-18-03 11:28 PM

i thought that shit was aight dude. the last line was probably the best in my opinion, but anyway the flow was ok it could still elevate a little, the wordplay and vocab were ok, they too could probably elevate, but for a newbie ur alright, keep postin and elevatin, that was pretty good.

peace.....

Maven 09-19-03 12:00 AM

one piece posted per day.
read the rules kiddo.
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