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Mr.Christensen 09-19-03 02:32 AM

Acceptance
 
umm well i did this as an open mic but was told this migh fit better here...

Acceptance

GOD made man in moderation
We all have a curse and a blessing
I must be messing with temptation
In contemplation of why I'm stressing

Is acceptance all that we seek in life
Or are we content with normality
In actuality I can’t deal with that fallacy
Cause I lie in wait for this lie to dissipate

Spending time in constant critique
Should we not all be happy with our self
Then we are dealt with this belief
Be unique… like everybody else

*Attempt of a new rhyme scheme for myself*

Speek.E.Z. 10-13-03 02:16 AM

Ahh A Self Image Poem.. I Liked It, This Was Good Stuff, It Got Right To The Point, THe Vocab Was Amazing.. Better Then Me :( But I Liked Your Topic You Did It Very Well..

LadyWun 10-13-03 07:24 AM

i enjoyed your rhyme scheme, it is similar to mine (my style) but
i dont put all the big words. In this it sounded great but
sometimes you can have more with less. Know what I mean?
You content was good, you didnt really go off subject, but in parts
of it , it looked like you were just trying to find words that rhymed
just relax poetry is feeling in words.

FAVORITE LINES

"Should we not all be happy with our self
Then we are dealt with this belief
Be unique… like everybody else"


but i think that you could have put it into a better sequence.
overall it was a decent read, worth it. Keep writing.

Smooth JT 10-13-03 08:47 AM

"Is acceptance all that we seek in life"

For most people this is to true. All they worry about is being in the prep group or the jocks or what not. Dare to be different. Grood drop, I enjoyed it and it caught my attention. Was easy to read. Thanks for the read. spect JT

rule 10-13-03 09:44 AM

good poem...had good wordplay and great vocab...topic was pretty creative...and the flow was good...good drop...8/10


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