Carring The Torch
 

ITS THE IMAGE AND THE STYLE OF THE SATICOY TOWN LYRISIS,
IM USING YOUR MIND EVERYTIME THAT YOUR HEARING THIS,
SEE WE CARRY THE TORCH, THE GAME OF LYRICAL SPORT
2ND, THIRD, FOURTH AINT REALLY IMPORTANT
SEE MY STYLE IS IMMORTAL, THE HUMAN RAPPING DISORDER ,
USE YOUR DIME AND A QUATER ,SOME BODY CALL UP A CORONER CUZ I JUST MURDER SOMEBODY,
SOMEBODY AINT REALLY HEARD OF ME, PIERCING HIS BODY AND GIVING LYRICAL SURGERY ,
THE STATE OF EMERGENCY FEELING THE URGENCY ,
CERTAINY HURTING WHEN REALEASING IT VERBALLY,
EXPOSING ANATOMY ,SUCKERS THAT BATTLE ME, HEAVILY HEATED WHEN IM EXPOSING VOCABULARY, THE REASON A MAN IS BURREID, A TRIP TO THE SANCTURARY, HIS CRAZY TO BATTLE SOMEBODY HIS NOT BETTER THAN
SHARKS

Likin some of ya wording but dont think ya structure is very consistant, overall VERY average 4/10

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"SEE WE CARRY THE TORCH, THE GAME OF LYRICAL SPORT
2ND, THIRD, FOURTH AINT REALLY IMPORTANT"

Thought these were your weakest lines, coulda done better

it was aight u had some good lines but also some weak ones but i liked it

It was a alright peice, flow was alright could be better, You did have some good lines and bad ones, you could touch it up a little bit to make it better, but it was a alright peice, Keep Dropping.

I agree wit my mane Masta C ,coulda been better flow and shit,but good and bad lines,could work if u fixed up.but keep writin dawg.holla.


CTF(represent)

try ending all your lines at the same point, keeps for a more consistent flow, this wasn't too bad, but that keeps it consistent then you can work on adding to your structured rhyme scheme/flow development.