[insert dope title here.....pt.2]
 

Forbidden warnings, our country fightin with what happens/
It's sad, seems to think our most intellectual are in straight jackets/
We've gone mad, but the problem is what we fear/
We go to war, in every issue that we interfere/
Seems like we have no other place to go, no place to hide/
like our shining teens, who seem to plunge into suicide/
They never return one death is a tragedy/
A million is a statistic, won over by genious strategy/
Seems like we lost, our war before it started/
but our demise is painfully slow, our death has been retarted/
The apocalypse begins, we look deep into our fate/
We draw closer to our downfall, what romans and persians could relate/
The losing side uncovers, the deep of hidden mysteries/
But take a look at our streets, and tell me if you feel our miseries?/
We lost what we had, and we found what isn't ours/
We found what it is like, destroying minor powers/
Our planet is over, our fate has already been written/
Look at our church, each sin a priest is committin/
Sodomizing, in the house of our very own Lord/
Not realizing, their necks are sliced,by the good of Gods Sword/
Our lives our over, due to original sin, our pains not a mistake/
But our final days are written in, a stone plagued by our fate/

Pain is written through, our blood and its veins/
and with poison in our body,how much can it maintain?/

Uppity Up

damn why cats be sleeping on you?
this was a tight peace in my opnion and i think it should be more reconized i cant wait to read more

It's sad, seems to think our most intellectual are in straight jackets/


That was so ill... it means alot man...

This drop was dope, you had nice vocab, your flow was a lil kinda off, but you bounced on it, your meta4s n similies could have had work, but your topic / origniality made it all up man... this was a nice drop... people need to be checkin up on this man. good job.

Thanks uppin for more replies.

Damnit.
Uppity Up!

Yeah i agree this was a sick drop,

'Seems like we have no other place to go, no place to hide/
like our shining teens, who seem to plunge into suicide/'

'The losing side uncovers, the deep of hidden mysteries/
But take a look at our streets, and tell me if you feel our miseries?/'

^^those bars stuck out for me.

tight drop here man, i was feelin it.

Ill mane keep droppin dat dope shit.holla.


CTF(represent)

look that shit was real real real hot especially

The losing side uncovers, the deep of hidden mysteries/
But take a look at our streets, and tell me if you feel our miseries?/

either way im in a hurry, i want to know if you want to collab with me, pm me or something with your answer.

U had sum great lines a good flow i give 9\10 on dis one keep on spittin dis shit

nice peace........def right anything they interfere with does end up in disaster..........the piece was aight,,,,,,,,,,,,,,............................... ...............................

UPPITY UP!

Good Job ...

i did like this peice, some great meanings involved, also i saw some good internals and good usage of words, the flow came out nicely and the topic was cool. find a title for it mayun, cus its something you should really work on, overall decent peice .. Stay up!

Adious!

Thanks.... again for all the feedback, greatly appreciated. Faze² thanks for that comment, thats the type of shit that makes me wanna elevate till I have you all saying Great piece, instead of overall decent.Uppin

Forbidden warnings, our country fightin with what happens/
It's sad, seems to think our most intellectual are in straight jackets/


great way to start out a pretty dope piece the content in these two lines is more then most cats put into entire songs so on that big ups

The apocalypse begins, we look deep into our fate/
We draw closer to our downfall, what romans and persians could relate/
The losing side uncovers, the deep of hidden mysteries/
But take a look at our streets, and tell me if you feel our miseries?/


about here is where i really started to feel the flow and the message of the entire piece gave me goose bumps the way you compared ours to ancient societies

Pain is written through, our blood and its veins/
and with poison in our body,how much can it maintain?/

i wasn't really feeling this as an ending it seemed to lack what the rest of the piece had, which is real deep emotion, overall this was a very good drop, keep it up homie