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unaccountable, like a negative infinity.. unsurmountable
sereneness? recountable.. ability to regard space 'n' time, powerful
how outstanding, to look at the heavens point blank,
dictate why the sun lights a background, which comes dark,
wow, better than certain testimonies, sees millenia in a day.
whilst horror frets, being good and assured that there's a way
so aint fazed, shit, my back could reverse electromagnetism
invulnerable, though righteous, breath could have a planet schism
perfect in him, holding the cosmos in palms, not like atlas
greek gods, titans? wannabes! with no camera tricks, light? faster!

yo, what's this shit about now... lol...

oh shit.... lol... nah, yo, no disrespect man...
I just didn't find what you was saying too intersting... maybe cause I'm mad tired...
yo, I like the vocab, shit was strong, wordplay was cool, and the flow was decent...
Pretty short verse... shows you got skill.... but it didn't really keep me interested...

Peace

yep... thanks and such... comments were mostly probably due to sleep... cause it wasn't as bad as you made... so uppin for more feedback....

i didnt get what tha topic was if there was one,tight vocab,tight imagery,didnt rhyme too well,a bit choppy,all in all i give this piece a 7 out of 10,keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

perfect in him, holding the cosmos in palms... who could he be? god

upping...

i agree with alias-c, it was pretty decent though

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