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Da NFamous 09-21-03 03:40 PM

Indecision
 
i watch her soul pour from her eyes see serenity in her face~
gorgeous pools of love to wade in and escape life and erase~
everyday mistakes i made last 24 hours i need some balance~
in my world of tipped scales i need to get my holy grail in the palace~
i'm duckin malice on the ave in the sun time but find peace in the passion~
shaped like a peach is what her ass is shorty is teachin me smashin~
leave me with lashins even though the day is hard my nights i lay at ease~
elated the supreme nigga searches for warm love but when i stray i freeze~
the sweet lips lead to entrance of the matrix but the pill is between my hun's thighs~
my seed is between my legs and when the sunset is when my son rise~
her dreamy eyes follow me when im not near her back pocket entices me awfully~
pushed toward the cliff of insanity her full lips whisper thus killing me softly~
as i approach the gates of heaven on a night of angellic love~
i drop my jaw as i what i watch and abhor a sight where hell rose above~
the crust of this earth im dusted but birth, of pain makes me see stars~
my wife on the bed lays in pain i see the color of veigns l-i-k-e mars~
my daughter approaches the doorway an grasps my knees at the scene~
a tear touches her braided head and she looks up as what i speak is obscene~
i've lost my gangsta lean at a price beyond what i'll ever touch pushin bricks~
so for my daughter i represent life instead of h-e double hockey sticks~

Da NFamous 09-22-03 10:30 PM

umm uppin

WeRd-smith 09-23-03 02:08 AM

WOW....powerfull piece.....the joy of love and the pain of loss....repentance and just WOW...the whole piece was dripped with emotion....deep and tender to raw and festering...this was a well written piece i would like to hear in audio....interesting conceopt and madd props to you

Smooth JT 09-23-03 10:52 AM

heart and soul are what make poems great. When they come from the heart it's unbeieleiveable. Great peice. LIke werd said wow. Resepct and admiration, peace

Split-eyez 09-23-03 02:35 PM

powerful piece... I must say that every single piece of you keeps amazing me... you always seem to put it right
this was felt, ... luved ya describtions, ya just have the right words.
Keep droppin dawg, ya work is amazing and respected

peace

Da NFamous 09-23-03 10:35 PM

^^thanks to all three of ya'll for the great feedback, means a lot to me, 1luv.

Da NFamous 09-24-03 10:20 PM

elevation is key, 1luv.

Da NFamous 09-25-03 10:18 PM

i suppose the lack of replies suggests snoozing so here goes he final up, 1luv.

Da NFamous 10-10-03 07:59 PM

so i lied, i like this piece and elevation is key, 1luv.


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