the clock goes tic toc
 

man i cant stand seeing people suffer and cry/
i cant stand watching people drop and die/
i cant stand people starving for much better life/
can this get any worse than a gun and a knife/
so many people with mad minds/
so many people jumpin past the lines and people just cant put this shit behind/
people deaf and people blind/
some people with both have tough times/
writin these rhymes and spittin them the fast i can/
learnin and growin to be a man/
cant someone fix all this and bring the peace/
we are all like a puzzle with a missing piece/


the clock starts to go tic toc/
next thing you know you hear someone shot/
you hear people breathin fast/
man lets put away the past/
move on to the future and stay strong/
how long will this last until people can stay away from wrong/


life is hard and wont come easy at all/
its like climbin a mountain to the top and try not to fall/
if you do you gotta go back up and remain tough/
in this world there is no such thing as enough/
you see the media showin negative pictures/
makin people look what they not and causin a lot of craziness goin and hurtin peoples look terrible/
they just jump on you and nibble until they get to the skull/
you gotta live life to the fullest or you wont reach your goal/



the clock starts to go tic toc/
next thing you know you hear someone shot/
you hear people breathin fast/
man lets put away the past/
move on to the future and stay strong/
how long will this last until people can stay away from wrong/

the clocks ticking to the end and you gotta spend the time to figure the ending/
you gotta do what you want and not let go until you reach the top is all depending/
its all depending on what you decide and move forward past mistakes and past what has been declined/
move past your mind and show people what you can do and create what is happening/
end the enmity of the world so we can all live peacefully/
either that or live in fear where its not suppose to be/



the clock starts to go tic toc/
next thing you know you hear someone shot/
you hear people breathin fast/
man lets put away the past/
move on to the future and stay strong/
how long will this last until people can stay away from wrong/ x2

Yo This Was Good.... A Bit Long To REad But Worth It.......

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