was bored hava look see
 

looking at the night so clear.....thinking about everything thats in my mind....pounder about the questions in life that have no real answer.... what is stronger, mentle or physical power? Is life fate or free will?? As I sit and wounder and think the mentle debate begins in my head. Going back and forth, so many reasons.... The pros and cons take side and it starts to be complex...... Let my mind free for a bit.....everything flows...family.....friends......her..... a million miles an hour........as it flows at the speed of light........
until i open my eyes....see the sun is rising.....put this debate on hold......for another nite........

pretty good i thought, good aspect an though, i think you could elavate a little an keep working, keep it up peace

Smooth JT, you read my night poem i see? LOL ok peice my nigga, but elevate yeah?

peace and love

yo nice piece, could relate to it... like when you just gaze at the stars and think bout what you're really down here doing. nice drop... feel like ya can elevate on it though,... but message was understood
keep droppin

peace

uppin this for more feed

Good job baby. I liked it. Yea many ?s and they all seem to be put aside for another day. Sounds familiar. U got ur point across and u did a good job of it. Everything was good on it, structure, flow, and whatnot. Overall good job, keep it comin. Much love. Ur princess.

This was an ok piece
looks like something i read on here a couple days ago, similar concept
it looks like im late on this one, but anyways
i think you could've got deeper into each thing you said, it's like you just tapped the surface on thoughts you could have dug into to make it more interesting and make the reader understand a little bit more
the vocab could've been elevated along with that also
overall ok piece
keep elevatin
keep writin
~Sage~

Imagery structure and flow were straight.. I liked this, I was feeling it... Not many words to sum this piece up. LoL. Good job though, tiight drop.

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