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A.T. 09-22-03 12:50 PM

whack!!!!!!!!!!!
 
this "criminal" is rhymin metaphorical miricles to split you in two,
Flows that are spherical leave you with indifferent additudes-
when I'm dissin-your-crew.... and your listening to,
the same shit that got Pac shot cause I got you head locked and not lettin-you-loose.
I'm stretchin your noose and confessin some news,
leave your neck stressin worse than Ja Rule when Em' let em know who "rules".
These fools have gotta have an abnormal brain cell function,
I got strangest style comin, but never the less I remain derranged and drunken.


lmao... this is wack...
im at school and tired as fuck... see yall later

Ctownzfinest21 09-22-03 05:23 PM

overall dat was good im fellin yo shit dawg.holla

C-TownsFinest5 09-22-03 06:07 PM

yea yo shit was aight. i liked it.holla.

Pugilist 09-22-03 07:22 PM

not bad man, nice short drop, i was feelin some of ya multi's and wordplay, i like your style.

Menik 09-22-03 10:24 PM

Yeah this was a alright peice, nice short drop, it had decent flow and your multies were good, your wordplay was pretty good i thought, keep dropping..and if you could, check out me and gene pools peice called 2 of a kind, thanks.

gotaloveforrap 09-22-03 11:21 PM

this was actually ok dude. i was feelin the style. the vocab and wordplay were good, and overall that was a pretty tight post. good drop, cant wait to read more.

yo can u check out my post, its called 'back in hell', thanx

peace.....

WeRd-smith 09-23-03 01:55 AM

this was short as fuck making it difficult to give any real feedback but bear with me.
it had a decent flow and some wordplay, multi's were there wit some average to decent vocab, i'd like to see you extend this a bit and i'll give a more thorough feedback

WORD~PERFECT 09-23-03 02:52 AM

TIGHT LIL SOEMTHING

SummonedTitan 09-23-03 02:52 AM

flow was decent but your multis caught me red handed dawg, it was thowed dawg. short piece, no doubt, but it was nice over all, you had plenty of room to spit more... some lines were kinda played and under average, but you made up with ethe rhymescheme (cuz of ya multis)... nice spit... work on the creativity tho...

A.T. 09-23-03 12:16 PM

lmao... this was whack as hell... i just thought I'd put a lil sumthin down and the teacher told me to get off the internet so I couldnt finish... I never thought that I'd get so much feedback... and POSITIVE feedback at that... it just amuses me...but I thank all yall for your feed.
A.T.


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