Not Going Home Tonight(sorry Girl)
 

It's simply said, on the phone, rushing my statements/
Its not that i don't love, or not that i want a replacement/
Wer'e havin our problems,shit is getting harder to deal/
sorta deck of cards,glued together,or getting free meals/
My life revolved around you,like earth to the giant sun/
I thought about you every moment,like a killer with his gun/
Thinkin about what to do next, how to surprise my loving girl/
I digged to the deepest,swam the depths,went everywhere/
looked into hearts and personalities,your unique to this world/
but our problems like ends of masturbation,its gotten out of hand/
I wish I never could think of you,with another man/
the reason I ain't coming, and I may not ever come back/
Is because I felt that you betrayed me, I felt this all,infact/
My feelings of you will never disappear, But betrayal is worst/
You broke my heart in two pieces,now its at the cemetary,out a grey hearse/
You fucked up, but I guess you weren't the one to blame/
I never gave you what you wanted, never listened to your claim/
I put this on me, my fault, my problem that i live with/
I won't be returning,but my love will come back to live/
Even though my heart is dead, when i found out that they were His kids/


Love you.

DIfferent to me not used to dat.but its aight tho.flow was aight,but try to make yo lines be da same length.but overall aight.like.


CTF(represent)

i thought it was a average attempt, your style is novice, you should try and use multis instead of only rhyming at the end of each line....................

Holla......................KEEP SPITTIN

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average attempt, not bad, but not brilliant......................................... ............could get better,cos you have a quite good style

of course I do have a good style, fool. My writers Block is blocking me from thinking of things, like....ok lemme not say anything :)

I liked it, although it def doesn't flow cleanly. With a little work and the right inspiration..... elevation is not out of reach.