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What life gives - Collab : ST n The Realist
I've settled for the life i have portrayed//
different backgrounds, initial these days// Take it back to the time we were all kids// Who would have known, what exactly life gives// From the first start, this isn't what i've chosen// Fighting my life frozen, not to move when i'm provoken// Its like lifes part of the mic chokin' like the cords wrapped in token// To take my thoughts my minds broken// I stand here infront of you as a man without a cause// A rebel... just without a pause, take it like a minute, spoken with a jaw// I live my life one foot at a time, one beat without a rhyme// Take it from me kid, the shoes that i stand in, arent worth the miles time// I wish i could go back in the day, and rid my self of worries in prime.........// I've settled for the life i have portrayed// different backgrounds, initial these days// Take it back to the time we were all kids// Who would have known, what exactly life gives// Coming up from the womb came out kinda soon Mother's eyes and daddy's hair bristled like a broom Middle child syndrome, mental shit I been through Drew a knife to a twenty two when I was still blue New to this, he made fun of my lunchbox man How many little kids you know own a grand Reprimand then made it all seem like a plan How am I cute when I'm shaving with knives Didn't know I was I. Q.'ed at 89, crazy right Yet tested I blew the shirks mind, like Einstein Took a criminal test, passed with flying colors Yet I know I'm pacifist at best , cause I piece other I've settled for the life i have portrayed// different backgrounds, initial these days// Take it back to the time we were all kids// Who would have known, what exactly life gives// What i have is what i've shown, my heart's mind's eye// taken for blind, not one to show love for those not mine// I wish it was all back to normal, before everything happend// When it was rock, and before i started rappin'// Its not my case to bitch, neither is it yours// But i'm not here to tell a story, so don't tell me yours// My lifes like the itches without cures// It wont stop itself, something i'm used to for years// I've drowned in sorrows, gulped endless breaths of beers// But down the run way, i'm lost, a straight shot for nothing but cheers// I've settled for the life i have portrayed// different backgrounds, initial these days// Take it back to the time we were all kids// Who would have known, what exactly life gives// Summoned Titan The Realist |
damn realist was really good in this..
so was summonded titan, both had. nice verses with awesome thot put in. i really enjoyed it. |
uppin, fam thanks for the input... lil more chritique needed... seems like the realist comes harder than i in every collab :)
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THAT IS PURE POETICS I LOVED THIS FOR REALZ AND WANT TO SEE MUCH MORE
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This peice was good i liked reading it, good multies and good flow, i wouldnt mind seeing somemore of your peices, keep dropping, and if you could leave some feedback in one of my peices, thanks.
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This was decent, The Realist was very descriptive and put most of the image there, Summoned Titan was also decent. I recomend you work on your internals both of you, also work on your flow, make sure when you say it out loud that it works and your not stummbling over words. Overall this was enjoyable to read, you 2 are gettings alot better every drop.
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thanks fam! this is wonderful feed back, i'm just gonna up this once more to see what ya'll think some more... thanks again fam.
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I was really feelin this, the chorus really hit me. The whole concept was good.
Titan, good content in ya first verse, other then that it was aite. However i really liked your second verse, it was much cleaner, flowed better, and i felt it was far better then your first. Realist, solid verse man, flow was on point, and it was clever i was feelin most of it. nice collab, overall, shit was tight. |
upping this
thanx for the feedback people up up wa up Its That Simple |
really nice here loved the structure....flow....poetic kinda feelin
wordplay and vocab was there and was on point really overall nice nice nice piece enjoyed reading it... keep spittin holmes overall8/10 |
this was a tight collab, both verses went together well, nice vocab,good story,good rhyme scheme, all in all this piece was pretty clean.keep droppin tha hotness.~1~
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Good collab...
Imagery was especially good with realist... He definately had the better half... Good to summoned as well Good drop... Peep Huh? ft Chrit |
two-up
please i need to know how i can get better let me know Its That Simple |
kinda poetic but message and deep shit, good vocab, imagery for the realist was insane, to truly up you style find away to take imagery and the word play/similies displayed in other versus and try and combine them... still a dope flow nice drop
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