Dangerous Grounds pt 1 of 4
 

chorus x2
(we da motha fuckin finest of c-town\come around here and u on dangerous grounds\we watchin these hoes get dropped down\so u betta watch how u talk when we come around)
(jadee) u fuckin wit c-town and u on dangerous grounds\cuz we pullin out nines and we lettin off rounds\aimin straight at yo head\westside till im dead\columbia tennesee bitch dats what i said\and we aint gonna stop till we on top of da game\im gettin my money motha fuck da fame\but i aint gone change im gonna stay da same\u dont like me well all i can say is fuck ya mane\ya understand gimmie da pistol and ill bring da pain\cock da bitch back and blow out ya brains\see me and c-money we run dis shit hoe\we let dem bullets go from dat motha fuckin forty foe\ya'll kno how we roll stay pimpin on twenty foes\stay gettin dat doe\now u dont run shit no moe\cuz if u come round here we aint playin\we'll start sprayin\and leave yo ass dead were u layin\dats what happens when u fuck wit us\u kept talkin shit so i let da tech nine bust\and now u aint talkin no moe shit\cuz now u layin 6 feet deep in a casket.

Tell me if u like dis plz.holla

cmon plz leave feedback if ya read it i would appreciate yo opinion.holla back

wats up jadee mane go ahead and post it all mines next.holla


CTF(represent)

You definately need to work on all your basics.
Get a good structure.
Up your vocabulary, then it would've been better.
Work on your flow
and get a new topic, please, this is more played out then gameboy colors.
This was not a good piece, i wasn't feelin it, but elevation will help you out, learn from other vets open mics, and you'll get a picture. it works.

yo that was aiight, more vocab needed tho, and ya flow was lost some where in there, other than that it was alright.
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SkiddLeZZ shut da fuck u suck dick and nigga fuck u hoe.im gettin tired of yo bullshit dude.u suck ne way fucka.holla bitch


CTF(represent)

The fuck did I do to you?
I was giving constructive criticism.
You want me to lie and say it was a tight piece, so that nobody elevates and he sucks forever?
Thats how I learned, fucking Bitches...You want to beef when im trying to be in a good mood...what a bunch of bullshit.

lol
SkiddLeZZ Represent

aight man that was ok. ima say u need to fix ur structure, i suggest put ur lines down the page, the vocab should probably be elevated a little, and that also goes wit the wordplay. hold ur chin up though, ull get better with every post.

yo can u return the favor please?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81167
thanx

peace.....