===I coalesce-------=+
 

ne plus ultra
i look between......
two sides too full frontal it seemed.....
a serious life caught between verticle seams...
a mind, this life, a dream

Seperate lives and still we share the same name....
Rooted together forever deep within a picture frame......
Granted it seems i am the same being.
trapped, and unsure to a simple lifes meaning....

I breathe deep, and think?

This air is tasteless but still i digest it.....
Confusion compounding i compressed it...
i see more for me ... I coalesce....
A new Being....


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hmmm...to me this would've worked out better in poetry.
I seemed to catch a more poetic vibe off of it.
It had a deep subject matter, and vocab was good, but all in all, it seemed way too short, and though it was good, it would've been better in poetry.Good shit though.

sadly everyone sleeps at the poetry section so i usually put them in both to aquire more feed back thanks for the words.

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^^^like him i was feelin a poetry vibe, but anyway, the vocab and wordplay were ok, the content and topic were pretty original. keep postin man i really enjoyed readin that.

yo can u please check out my post if u have the time?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81167
thanx

peace.....