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Maven 09-23-03 09:59 PM

IC: King Of Theives vs Whitelightning
 
Rules

Verses Due: Saturday September 27th
Voting Ends: Monday September 29th


Topic: Insomnia

whitelightning 09-24-03 05:23 PM

checkin in...hopefully someone will show up this time

Otherwordz 09-24-03 08:27 PM

Yes!!!!!! Thanks for givin' the topic to an insomniac...in...

Otherwordz 09-27-03 04:11 AM

I gotta go to bed but demonz alwayz try to creep in my dreamz...
people don't seem...to understand how hard it is to try to sleep through the screamz...
I make sure my head is on straight cause it's kinda difficult to think with a lost mind...
if death is eternal sleep...then I gotta make up for the lost time...
wake up from your physically unconscious state of being...
I can't escape the seeing of death in the state of dreaming...
angel on one shoulder demon on the other...I can't get none of these fuckaz off me...
I think it's supposed to represent when I take my sleeping pills with a cup of coffee...
the storm has finally calmed down...the lightning and the thunder has died...
heaven is a tranquil state of slumber I cried...
as I was wide awake in the early morning with heavy bagz under my eyez...
as I lay me down to sleep...I try to pray while counting sheep...
it's obsolete...I found my feet slowly walking down my street...
before the break of dawn you would find me walkin' down my Brooklyn block...
cause every time I tried to count sheep...I kept on havin' visionz of a butcher'z shop...
a decent night's rest...is just about the only thought I keep in my head...
but I stay awake while I can...cause I"ma have enough time to go to sleep when I'm dead...

Otherwordz 09-27-03 04:13 AM

it's now 3am...I did a late night off the dome piece to make it official...lol...but I'ma try to sleep a lil' earlier tonight cause I gotta wake up at 7:30AM...so if I get to sleep now I'd have a good almost 4 and a half hourz...

whitelightning 09-27-03 04:23 AM

So Many Innocent Depicted Civilians
Look Through The Frosted Glass at the Villians
Since You Have Power, You Are Above The Law
No Matter How Many Times Daddy Socks Ya In The Jaw
There Are Bruises, No Physical Proof
The 911 Call Looks Like a Wayans Spoof
The Kid Handles Heat Since He Deals Drugs
He's Trying So Hard To Be Like Those Song Imaged Thugs
The Piece is For Protection and Infinite Strife
He's Not Afraid To Pull The Trigger and End Daddy's Life
The Lead Would Permanantly Pierce The Skin
Enough Damage To Notify The Next Of Kin
The Deal is Sealed, His Mind is Made Up
Father Was So Shocked, Broke Faster than a Porcelain Cup
Hatred, Tears and Raw Emotions Exploded Simultaneously
How Did Everyone In His Neighbourhood Miss? It was easy-to-see
All Those People Kept Repeatin " We Are On Too Ya"
The Poor Kid Suffered From Skitzophrenic Insomnia

Mystery~murdera 09-27-03 10:51 PM

damn it, white lightening started on a real good piece. Then fell off like christopher reeves. Because of that i gotta give my vote to king of thieves even though i thought his verse could've been alot better.

This right here killed it for me...

Quote:
How Did Everyone In His Neighbourhood Miss? It was easy-to-see
All Those People Kept Repeatin " We Are On Too Ya"
The Poor Kid Suffered From Skitzophrenic Insomnia
i thought that coulda been worded alot better and woulda been alot more powerful.

Chrit 09-27-03 11:29 PM

Hmm... expected more after KOT's verse last week...

Still nice stuff from both...

KOT stayed more consistent and held my attention better...

So Vote- KOT

Otherwordz 09-28-03 04:00 AM

^^^lol...yeah...I already wrote about 4-5 piecez about insomnia...so all my material was kinda used up...I try to make all my piecez on here straight out the cabbage patch...all spur of the moment off the dome shit...thats why some of my piecez are so much betta than otherz...

NewPort 09-28-03 09:08 AM

Simple Breadown Here Kids..

Opener - KOT
On Topic - KOT
Flow - Whitelightning
Depth - KOT
Creativity - Niether
Metas - KOT
Wordplay - KOT
Shock Factor - Niether
Finisher - Whitelightning

Overall - KOT

2hot2handle 09-28-03 03:33 PM

i gotta go with thievz. it was a good battle. thievz was more on topic and he had better flow. vote is thievz.

LaRyan Shabaz 09-30-03 02:43 AM

It was said that KOT held attention better, and that is what it was. His POV kept it interesting, it's more rare for someone to use the topic as perspective rather than a story regarding. Whitelightning's was not bad and could have been good, but... I kind of hated the way the actual topic was used in it. Schizophrenic Insomnia? Eh... that hurts me.

angel on one shoulder demon on the other...I can't get none of these fuckaz off me...
I think it's supposed to represent when I take my sleeping pills with a cup of coffee...

This is the line I liked most out of the whole deal.

Vote-King of Theives

Maven 09-30-03 11:00 PM

king of theives wins.

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