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IC: Camarac vs Understatement
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Damn Maven, My Collab Verse Fits Sooooooo Dope To This Topic - Mind If I Use What I Had For It In This?
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^see, you could do that, if you wanted to be a whore :)
I don't wanna battle against material I've seen! |
I said it last week, and i'll stress it again, my pieces are more poetry-esque, if you cant look between the lines and find the inner meaning / emotional aspects then please, dont vote, its deeper than you'll see on face value alone. .
Lego Life Downing Spirits on the Ghost Train. . Provoking the Folk of Now A Days, Pirate of the Sound Waves. With Buried Treasures under my Foul Taste. A Sour Fate Followed Suit Tomorrow’s Youth drew from the Zinc Prisms, Now Creating Visual Blizzards. . its the Blink and you’ll Miss It Ink Wizard. His linked wisdom remains Un-Matched, Echo his Surface Scratched Plee, But in his Family Tree, he’s now Carved a Masterpiece of Crafted Speech. the Last to Breath, so Tactfully written, Actually spittin a Sacred scripture, An Artist at Heart. . Sits in the Dark to Paint A Picture of A Painted Picture. This tainted fixtures recalling thoughts of when a man in the noose jumps Nine to Five Raps R.L Stine. . What I Write gives The reader Goosebumps. Center of a Media Zeus Hunt to Steal My Thunder with intellectual patients, Feeling like. .the Assorted Assortment reserved Only for Special Occasions. Fatal Sediments Paving the Game And, Yet i Face Fears with a Game Plan, & now Fakes Sneer at the Way Cam's like Shakespeare with A Spray Can. Takes Years for a Made Man to lay Goblets, Stay Honest, Amaze n Astonish able to Cradle a sonnet, placing Food for Thought onto a Table of Contents. Maybe ive Lost It. . my Inspiration feeds Logic in Fables & Topics now i see, Tomorrow as a Lot More than Twenty Four Hours. . but as an Oppourtunity. While Rocking Fluently with Martian Guitarists, my Hearts been Lead Astray, Intended to Stay Slane, im that Second before Midnight that'll End Your Day. Nothing Ventured, is nothing gained. Rhymes Complex like My Minds Design, Pleedin`, & Revenge is Sweeter than the Sugar Coated lies you Hide Behind. Welcome to the Block. . . .of No Emotion, and False Expression as The Wind Blows, where The Path To Success is actually a Yellow Brick Road The townsfolk are out of reach, never speak, bicker or kiss, just go about their Buisness in an inch high of Ignorant Bliss. Its sinking in, & drowned in despression, pen holds my sight This is torture, maybe i should just give up, and Lego of Life. . Its Sink or Swim . . you either Think to Win or Drown in the Waves Present of your Saviours Pen, Bleeding The Stone Dry, Hope's Cries played & spent, Ladies and Gents. were your Lives Meant to be Bent across? All love is lost, But this is where I started caring. And this is where I stopped. I care a lot for my Surroundings, yet this Mountain of mounting depression, Seems to Be, Bleeding the Scenery, leaving imagery Doubting my questions Id shout from the heaven of Cloud Nine and Sew its Lining, twining a verse, Lonely, & made to feel like the Scum of the Earth on the Scum that is Earth. Stumbling First. . then Gathering Pace, Disparaged Marriage of Love & Hate, Amongst Waves of Tongueless Fate, Predicting this Diction Above the State. The Colours Fade, Distortin My Pride, Red White and Blue caught in My Eyes, but can the cross of Saint George Take Force and Change the Course of my Life? Tortured Inside . . my Mind Was Set, & Tonight Was It, my Escape Planned, Id follow the Rainbow and then Discover the Colours held Inside Fates Hand, Eyes Glazed and Abstract, the White Hope holdin a Kaleidoscope Joint show, A man of the Digital Age, maybe i should log off and install 'Life: Version 2.0' I Attoint Flow to Sum up my Worth, Write to Stomach the Hurt in Morbid Lips, a Blazing Ode to Amazing Gold, no chance of Stopping This Block Apocalypse. Mocking scripts with False Ideas. . so This Plastic Town, Cant Bring Me Down Wondering while Wandering amidst Blocks of Bottle Tops, an Singing Frowns. . Welcome to the Block. . . .of No Emotion, and False Expression as The Wind Blows, where The Path To Success is actually a Yellow Brick Road The townsfolk are out of reach, never speak, bicker or kiss, just go about their Buisness in an inch high of Ignorant Bliss. Its sinking in, & drowned in despression, pen holds my sight This is torture. maybe i should just give up, and Lego of Life. . Sorry Pat! |
Purposely Embedding Things, With Perfectly Squared Purple
Suddenly The Wedding Ring Turns Into The Squared Circle So I Compare Hurdles;Try To Decide How High I Should Jump Legs A Plastic Stump, Fail Miserably Where I Should Triumph Sailing Insistantly, The Assembly De-Railing Consistantly Fast Speeds, Like Last Deeds Keep On Trailing Persistantly Instantly It Comes To Me, Why Would God Want To Run From Me? Guns for free, To Shun The Sea, Sitting Sadly, Try To Be Death's Shroud Where Breaths Found;Feet Stick To Ground Fresh Outside; South Flies Reveal The Inside Is Brown Gourd Of Flat Fires, Double-Edged Sword Of Satire Dulls Think With Shattered Skulls While Your Neurons Feed Gulls I Dropped My Double Stitches, So Now I Sow The Seeds Pantsed Sir Lancelot, So Much For Pure In Heart And Deed What Do We Need? Necessity Is The Mother Of Invention Jesus Confessed To Me, But I Wasn't Paying Attention It's An Honourable Mention; Not Any More Or Any Less Everyone Return The Pretention Without A Word To Bless Racing In The Street, Religion Is Defacing My Defeat My Mouth Is All That's Left And The System Had Me Beat Within An Inch Of My Life, But They Missed And Took A Seat How Many Letters Will Get Her To Understand The Word Better Being A Jet Setter, Will Let You Tear It Apart Together Bear It To Heart Together; Take It Down To The Tricks Bag Full Of Bricks Will Make You Frown For The River Styx Take It Back A Couple Seconds, Play The Tape In Rewind Try To Teach Knuckles Lessons, Forcing You To Re-find Yourself In The Music, Abuse It, Make The Father Hurt So Choose It With Care, And Stare At The Moutains I Burnt And The Lessons I Learned, But We Don't Mention That Part In Detention At Heart, But Truthful Dissention is an Art So I Become What I Create; Lips Unmoving, But I Debate My Face Is Only Paint, Leaving You Lonely And Sedate It Made You Faint;Plastic Ground Is All Your Back Found Lego Blocks Falling Down, Faster Than Bagged Kittens Drown Pulling A Frown, Out From My Dresser Drawer Full Of Smiles As My Plastic Family Scatters Broken Across The Floor Tiles Sorry Ian! |
sorry herbs..........lol
umm sorry if my vote is a bit short, cause i already replied to ur shit in open mic cam and u know what i think............................ look i think Understatement took this, cause his rhyme scheme and concept was doper, i mean i sorta knew he was gunna get my vote when he told me to d/r i mean when i read the first few lines, umm sorry IAN u fuckin herb lol j/k, umm i mean ur verse was long as hell, and dope as hell dont get me wrong, but i likd understatements approach to this better, like his metas were like sayin he's a real lego man and i liked that, and his scheme i liekd better, bah, i dunno i mean in all fairness we are all netcee homies, lol, under took this, i liked his stlye better on this, i mean cam was dope with all the abstrack metas and good flow, but under had good flow and bahh i keep repeating myself under had a better approach/concept/scheme............................................ .................. flow = Cam multies = under wordplay = under scheme = under originality = under mentality = over content = under vote = under |
This was one dope as fuck battle. .
Cama'rock had the dopeness flow, great approach to the topic, and the nice, abstract, wordplay. Plenty of quotable lines, including the whole 2nd paragraph by itself. Very dope verse, although it was long as fuck. It was well worth the read. Understatement also brought fire to the topic. . Flow was good, concept was nice too. I liked your approach to the topic, also. The wordplay and multis were both there, liked reading your piece, dope shit. Overall, however, I think Camarac took this. . I was just feeling his verse more. . votecamarac |
This Was A Dope Battle...
& To Be Honest, I Wanted Camarac To Lose This One... But Unfortunately, He Did Not... Both Came W/ Dope Well Written Verses.. But Ultimately, Cam's Verse Outshined W/ Brilliant Imagery & Exceptional Wording.. Understatement's Would Have Beaten Alot Of Other Heads On Here... Including Me... But Cam Just Came Too Strong... A Little Long.. But Strong None The Less Vote CamaracaramaC Peace |
camarac- stuc to the topic well, i felt he had the better approach and understood the topic better. some of his lines clearly said to lego of life, ex: But this is where I started caring. And this is where I stopped. There were many other lines w/ a similar concept, and he stuc to it well. great vocab and imagery, although some of the imagery was hard to understand at times. (especially for those of you who have the vocab of a second grader lol)
understatement- dope verse also. had good imagery also, and easier to understand... not as deep though. a little less vocab, didnt really tac away from the verse. i didnt enjoy his approach as well, however. this and the fact cam verse was a better topic approach give my vote to... CAMARAC now both of you vote on me vs bribeone1...please! |
I gotta agree with the previous 3. Even though understatement came beautifully cam's piece was a master piece. Nice work to both emcees and cams hook was the shit. Even though i dont know much about open micin it.
vote - cam |
Cam did take this...
AMAZING drops from both.... Wow... this is a title worthy bout.... Cam takes it just slightly better imagery.. and meaning within the topic... wow |
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I was actually speaking in third person there, meaning me. My family tree is not a masterpiece of my crafted speech, because as i see it - their the most preciius thing in my life, they created me, and w/o them i wouldnt be here. Thats what the line is s'posed to mean, lol. Nice piece though Pat, Word Perfect Represent! |
eh.....this was a pretty nice battle......nice comeback un...but cam
had it locked from the beginnin...good grasp on the topic...nice imagery.....good flow......all in all good battle...but... vote=James Bondage,Vortex,Camarac,blah blah blah |
well everything that i wanted to say has just been said both pieces were extremely good...way above average....but i have to go with camarac it seemed flawless to me..props
vote-Camarac |
Cam Iraq beat me with a fish.
this will be an audio collab later for all you sloth ticklers. [closed] |
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