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IC:LaRyan Shabaz vs 2Hot2Handle
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I am HERE!
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just checkin in, ill have mine by saturday.
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i look at the reflections in a mirror/
the skies start to turn clearer which means things will get better/ hopefully i can get rid of some reflections and keep some i want/ some of this shit i cant stand/ i am forgettin the interceptuions that have interfered with no more suspensions/ the reflections are just past images that are recorded in your brain/ it is like a non - stopping train that keeps followin until your insane/ denyin every reflection that has haunted and taunted and tried to step in my way/ lookin forward to every day that i live until my last day when everything i have done pays off/ i dont need more chokes and more coughs/ this is just the beginning of good things i want to quaff/ its like im on a desert with the sun beamin down on me/ being burnt off the suns reflections on my body/ i better move before i get more pain and feel and be permanent like a stain/ it wont go away its something you gotta live with/ i am gettin sick of everything i hear be a myth/ its leaving me hard and stiff like i am a dick/ everything is goin by so quick is what im gettin sick/ we gotta slow down and get things together/ the skies are clear so i dont want rainy weather/ |
Looking In. Upon Further Inspection...
Who Am I?... Oh, more importantly, is that a zit?! *Must you abuse me with inquiries such as this? At least this incarnation didn't require me to 'grant' shit* *Mother fucker, what are you thinking? Your involved ponderence is my wish...* Like, Love and Compliments are a foreign vision in this boring mix of submission and dominance/ It insights trouble when a lover labels you Above Average, how's that look to us?/ You could be normal, or better! The implications are obvious/ Fierce denial makes your overseer a liar in the eyes of distrust/ You've been inspired all your life to be the best/ But even amont the rest you'd find one with whom to rest/ An opportunity of saying "we" and "us"/ A chance of real Being with more meaning than purely lust/ You can take it in like that and let it fester and grow if you like/ It'll get the best of you, I hope you know: Thicker skin only needs a bigger knife/ Face it: Early on life is upfront and to your back is a breeze/ As it turns, strife turns it rough, like elbows and knees/ If you want nature, savor something other than burnt trees/ Get over your disbelief, you're all good guys and ladies/ Stop to smell the roses, even if you're afraid of bumbling Bees/ Next time take care not to simply stare through it/ There's more than just you, when you see the surrounding, you'll see your true val-ue/ Learn to love not just the blue, but the greys too, just as He drew it/ Cuz two years from now, it could be you who says: Damn, I blew it/ It's a shame what modern man must do to see clearer/ The world around you enshrouds you beautifully, oh Mr. Man in the mirror/ |
this has to be a no show its now sunday
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man next time come prepared instead of typin it up at the last minute. this is obscene and embarassing.
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he edited it to make it look like it was at 11:52, it was really posted past midnight.
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Okay... now that the vote swaying is over...
You really don't like it? Damn... I didn't realize how obscene and embarassing it was... Sorry bro. Peace. |
Oh shit... I'm sorry I was typing my shit at 4 minutes after the hour. I mean, if that's a big problem... you know. I don't want you to have to be a poor sport about it. Could you just be quiet now?
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im not bein a poor sport im just sayin get it in better next time thatnhaving it late.
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First Off.. This Was A Poor Battle.. Really Weak
Compared To Other League Battles Simple Breadown Here Kids.. Opener - La On Topic - Both Flow - 2Hot Depth - La Creativity - None Metas - La if Any Wordplay - La If Any Shock Factor - None Finisher - La Overall - La |
Yeah, i didnt really fell 2hots verse either, but i disagree, i dont think LaRyan won this, 2hots had a lot more substance, i liked his take on it, neither came really dope, but they'll learn as the league continues i guess.
Vote2hot2handle |
Wow... That's incredible.
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2hot2handle-don't freepost in your thread. and don't sway votes. and don't be a poor sport. this is all for fun, so if you're going to be a dick about time's and dates and all that you can just screw off.
now, on the positive side of things, I'm going to critique you both. 2hot-Your verse had a lot of good content. The flow wasn't very good, and I thought there were a few lines that didn't rhyme, so you need to work on that. The random similes and metaphors were a really nice touch, because you connected thing that I didn't think had any connection. Overall, theres room for improvement, but it was still pretty good. LRS- damn. this was pretty nice man, your into was rather hilarious. Theres the flow issue here too. People will tell you that flow isn't important in a topical, but thats a filthy lie. Flow is always important. Your metaphors were incredibly nice. There was a lot of insight in this verse and it still made pretty good sense. Your closer killed it. vote: LaRyanShabaz |
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