Love Ruined?
 

why did you have to lead me on
only to have me find out somethin was wrong
i said i liked you, you said you liked me
now you got a boyfriend, you lied to me
why don't you grow up, and mature
i dunno if it's true, it's just what i heard

my heart is sore, like it's been broke
so i roll a joint, and take a toke
opening a bottle, drinkin a beer
making feelings and mind clear
I'm just a homie, meant to be lonely
before you run, get to know me

i know i made you mad, even made you pissed
maybe if you were nice, and stopped being a bitch
i tried to be nice, tried to be friendly
away from you, is where you sent me
but i'll find out the truth before i judge
i've never been one, to hold a grudge

Just a little keystyle poem i did at 3 am.....doesn't make sense at time but oh well...
uppin

pretty good...exspected better from you..but this game with a good emotional peice...rhyme was a little weak but flow was good, pretty good peice...keep it up

i thought this was tight, nice vocab, rhyme scheme was a little off but its poetry so who cares, tha point got across, and the emotion was felt,all in all nice piece man,~1~

yeh this was just a quick piece, didn't put much effort into it, but glad ya liked it for what it was

keep uppin

ummm.. its aigh

vocab is average, flow & structure r nice, i like how each stanza reviled more & more emotion as i read, i can really relate 2 this piece lol not in those exact words mind u, but i do :)

no doubt

uppin

uppin for last time

Sup Krem...
This was simple, but I liked it..Good imagery, it made me think of this one specific guy I know..hmm, maybe Ill call him..
Good piece, esp for something done at 3am.
Stay up!
Pz.

Not a bad piece...coulda been better..coulda been alot worse.

Not a bad poem tho none tha less. i felt this poem to an extent good drop tho
~WoN~

this isn't directed towards.....well you know who you are....it' directed to a different girl....so ya

and thanks for all who posted feedback and what not

peace