yo aiight, this my second post, another keystyle
 

yo, ok, sure you can talk the talk/
but can ya walk the walk/
an for your owns styles sake/
i hope you dont WALK like talk/
when i think of you/
the level of bow wow enters my thoughts/
if you had a skill level, it probably be Nought/
im like bread an butter/
wit a little bit of cheddar/
the perfect combination/
for sum 1 who rips like a shredder/
i assalts the entire nation/
wit 1 verse, i lead 2 semination/
a lotta rappers verses lead to stagnation/
but mine lead to world domination/

i wud appreciate sum knid of feed back...........
my last keystyle was wack............
but hopefully this 1 a little better.....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=80976

c'mon dawg's can sum 1 gimme some feedback,
why is every 1 on this site sleepin

alright straight up..you need to elavate...u ya vocab..and try to be crative...imagine things...or write something ith emotion..no hate dawg...just a help hint...dont take it the wrong way