Planet Home Bound [3rd post first OM]
 

if its too long, suck my net slong.................
[replied to camarac and this other wack bitch]

What do i see what do i see what do i see....
I see uncompleted projects, unkown prohets with overgrown profit,
So aknowlege this college of the smallest appauling pockets,
Ripping out eyesockets, with the vibration of a thousand earthquakes,
Peace reached with hand shakes, and when the storm bakes,
We'll see who's awake, taking precautions, so now who's bossing,
Got a map to the medal and i lost it, with my luck before i run outta
Breath i'll be exaushated, nausious precaucious about that rawkus,
Without a reason for breathing, and bleveing if the breif bleeding,
Animal sacrifices sufices for lives that, come alive when,
The lion len is habited by other races, and these rough cases,
Run out of thier spaces, this melting ice cap is up to our waists-n,
I'm replacing, my sense of high judgement by the public,
Servent with that pitfall stomach sergent snake eyed serpent,
Searching and serving, his country for no benifit for the hell of it,
Dried up resources, so i'll seek the fifth eliment, just so i can prove
That thier evidence is edivent, and stick it to the fucking president.

With the concrete heart of the non deciet earth i'll disburse......
Erase the history scripts of this flipped planet nation,
Face the misery fifth of the flipped so understand the paining,
Water down the desert to quench the thirst of the plantation,
Border down the peasents to bench the first of the mad masions,
With the concrete heart of the non deciet earth i'll disburse......

I'll still be here suffering grabing samples and rythm buffering,
toughening so i'm rougher in, this summoning, of the demon,
bleeching, the black lines so its clearer to predict if the end
is nearer, or just is it just here-a, that i see the doom day device
being created, damn i shouldnt have debated the re-latent,
non patient, fading agent, of the traces of mace thats,
swipining my eyes to blur out the innocence so in your sense,
its all been the lent, & i seen the tent, of the devil worship,
now i'm just guessing its worth it, for me to find the perfect,
surface to search this, cure i'm looking for now the earth is,
70 percent religious, 5 percent prestigious, 2 points fridges,
another 3 is broken bridges, half of the rest is a scrimmage,
9 percent is a grim age, the last part is unkown un controlled,
un patrolled, by the protection unit so how we gunna do this,
Fucking screw this, bolted into the youth is, half media rocked
bacteria truthless footage, so please walk half a day in my sole cushion
cause my foot is useless, this is the ticking time bomb that i'm diffusing.

With the concrete heart of the non deciet earth i'll disburse......
Erase the history scripts of this flipped planet nation,
Face the misery fifth of the flipped so understand the paining,
Water down the desert to quench the thirst of the plantation,
Border down the peasents to bench the first of the mad masions,
With the concrete heart of the non deciet earth i'll disburse......

Dopeness trill. .
damn, your opening bar to the first verse was a killer, good use of multi's and internals, really much like my style actually, lol. Good rhyme pattern, kept switching it up, that held my interest a lot actually, loved the abstract ness, `rawkus` line was worded dope, and this

^ Kinda fresh, not many kids try for illitertaion in pieces now, but i loved that, nice one my man!
Nice finish to the first verse with the 'fucking president' line, that was pretty hard hitting, strong writers voice and flow.
Hook was a nice touch to this piece actually, i liked how you flipped the opening line with the ending one, that was pretty cool, i liked it = )
Ooo0oo0oh, opener to verse two caught me offguard, pretty dope, good word choice there, liked this one:

^ Prolly my fave bar from this piece actually, really stood out. Ending bar was cool too, all in all you came through on this, very abstract, as i like, good use of multi's / internals / flow and original topic, which is just dope.

All in all a great piece, props my man!

Yeah this peice was real good i thought, it was a great read, multies were good, your flow was good too, you had good wording i thought, good concept too, overall id say it was a great peice and a good read, keep dropping.

*dons newbie mind set*

word
this was pretty dope....what cam said goes
ill
some vocab was beyond my comprehension (<whoaaaaaaaaaa!)
props

what^^^^^^^^^ really???
thanx for the reply fuckwit, hahah1 liner 1 liner

woah, read the verse then check my sig. .

dope verse aesop!

yep same to u faggot

you are bitter that cam caught you biting :)

this is a very well written piece, your style has gotten much better, and I appreciated the abstractness.
The section where you added all the pieces of the world I found particulary brilliant because it showed us your adding skills.
I enjoyed the entire piece.



like whoa.

thnx man.......hey just cause u cant add mr Canadian physics ballon car