Who Would Have Known...
 

Deleted at the request of writer.

Oh, and CLOSED.

6 of her posts ARE replies, Content. If you want people to reply to more than 6 pieces before posting up 1 of their own you have a lot more deleting to do cause no one is replying to 6 pieces before putting up their own..

u should jus delete this,
cuz this is sum bullshit

i wouldnt post a poem without
readin & followin the rules, but
its whatever

i completely agree with legendary

peace the fuck out

Content, you shouldve just closed this thread for a bit and not have edited it like that.


Well you can do is put her verses back then close this thread and then after she got done replying to some poems then you reopen it.


EDiting posts is not bad at all but it gets off sometimes.

THanks for your kind consideration.

sorry to shiznit...ha'nae...you followed the rules..many havent..

hand on over her mouth, She bites his pinky.. just
barely breakin' the skin, He bangs her head
hard against the dirty cigarette ridden
pavement..

i I felt this piece was good

BUT I also felt you forst too much description into it…like the CIGARETTE ridden pavement line… your piece would be more thinker friendly if some details were left out or shortened … your piece had great concept and was EXCELLENT on the storytelling tip…I feel if you lessened your descriptive words your piece wouldn’t be as cloudy and would be OUTSTANDING

Sorry to ha'nae on behalf of us all. It was a mistake. It isn't always like this. Not at all...

Onto the piece..

It was all quite predictable. But in a good way. It was fairly blunt in what it was saying. You tried to get behind the whole thing. The mindset, the emotions...the struggle. And you did it quite well. the flow was good. I was able to read it without stopping much. You didn't rely on rhyming or a set structure as such. Which i felt helped the piece a lot.

The ending was relatively tame. But in another sense, it was good.

...resp....