Rapbattles Chainsaw Massacre
 

I'm not hating this site, I really love it. I really do love it, this is great. I'm just being creative here. Pleeeeeaaaaaase don't ban me :)

My first day at rapbattles I said what the fuck is this?
I finally found a place where I can raise some ruckus YES!
Carried out my first move I was going to case the place
Moving through forums and threads with a ninjas grace
I checked out the regulars alot of players, alot of haters
Set up shop quietly so as not to alarm the moderators
Boobie trapped the whole joint like I was home alone
I've got to be the very best I want to own the throne
Be the biggest thing to hit up rapbattles threads ever
Come thru with a chainsaw and leave heads severed
Don a jason mask and kick your ass if you dare spit back
You're tac-tics offend my senses I insist you chew tic-tacs
If I gotta go I'll get drastic I'm going out in a big way
This whole place will blow up cause I study mcveigh
Do this thorough and precise take every precaution
Massacre isn't sad in my eyes this is the only option
Keep order in this chaos I'll line everybody up first
If your a freeposter or herb your gonna get it the worse
If your cute then I might grab your ass and kiss you
Your free to go home now honey I just dismissed you
Detonate at the count of three ready to crash this down
1 2 3 deafen the whole cyber space with a massive sound
Ow!

hahaha that's all I can come up with my brain just quit. lol

i liked it mami yur already elevaten plus you had some good punches in here

u have potential...
can see ur rhyme scheme is pretty good for someone new to this site
some good ideas within the verse
vocab was decent enough...was enjoyable to read unlike some noobs on here
good work
keep dropping and u'll improve :)

thanks. uppin

i thought the post was pretty good, the flow was ok, the wordplay was good, the topic was original, the content was also good, u got talent, just keep postin and elevatin cause that was a good post, cant wait for more to come.

peace.....

It was decent, flow was ok but it was really basic, only the externals rhymed and when they did it was like. . one syllable rhyming which i didnt like. The topic was kinda jkihgop as in, didnt make sense, it was yet another *sigh* "Bragging Writes" piece, wtf at 'had some nice punches' NO - IT DID NOT! Do you kids actually know what punches are? Overall it was decent, a little basic, flow could use a lot of work,m get a decent topic that includes imagery or emotion instead of a random piece like this one.

You have potential, just try and come up with something more creative.

i like it. good work on it but i like it.holla


CTF(represent)

thanks for the feedback camarac, you put shit in perspective i respect what you had to say. thanks for the reply c-town i'm glad you liked it.