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It was all plan perfect, sat in the dark thought abou't the crimes abou't to happen setting in the park with the money by the bridge snipers on the roof scope the scenary watching for them boys in blue/ Commense the drop car apperearing at 3:00 open shots bodyguards hit leaving me open for a wide shot/ I pray to god i find away out this mess bullets over my head nearly hit my chest throught this mess i keep a clear head equip my vest open the trunk load the macks and pay my respects, say a quick pray if i die nigga revenge same thing for you kamikaze never going to the pen/ Getting high while the actions goes on given my nigga the Q shoot the nigga with the sniper gun grab the case then we out in the van if it's a war they wan't it's a war feel with bullets and pain.

aight dude, once again ima say u need to change the structure, the wordplay was ok, as was the vocab, the flow fell off at times, u were lackin some multis i thought, and overall that was an ok peice, keep at it, keep elevatin, and ull get better.

peace.....

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