*death From Luv* :(
 

*DEATH SENTENCED FROM TRUE LUV*
*SHE BROUGHT IT UPON ME*
*HURTZ 2 THIS DAY*

*HERE IT GOES.....ENJOY*


damage of luv and truth hit my hard like a bad-lie
i admit ive braught u down, but my luv 4 u is 2 strong 4 me 2 be a bad-guy/
glares into my eyes, inflict pain on me and leave me destroy'd inside/
drive 2 be ur man,defind ur troubles and left u tear'd, with confuze, still love blind/
irratable ignorance,u stop'd comin 2 me, crushin me, y cant u be luvin-me/
stand in the rain so u can see, notin will stop me, 2 be by ur side, belive-me/
drop'd ur head, could it be true is our love dead,my heart bursted and 4 ever bleed/
years can go, but hurt swellz around my heartz remains and leaves me with 4ever painz/
nothin 2 give, no more 2 gain,stain'd luv washed away, faster then cryin in the rain/
wat changed u, wat keeps u from my side, u pushed me faster down as though i died/
currupt'd soulz growz within stopin me from luvin again, still frown'd by her, dont mater how ive been/
cant keep u 4 ever, but gurl i was there wen u where scared and lonely, it didnt matter/
cuz, friendship was there 2, grew 2 me and U, im still stuck 2 u liek glue/


CHORUS`1

gurl,luv was 2 strong 2 let it fall/
crushin hearts, pullin me down, throughout the hall/
wat did i do, look'd out 4 u, and still u could care-less/
without fairness u ran from my arms careless/


my own actions are my lives routes i need 2 take,couldnt fake,i luv u gurl 4 heavens-sake/
stare into space without cares on my mind/blind 2 ur face, but defind u bitch with disgrace/
hate has over-whelmed me and u will- figure-out/drunk of ur ass,funkin guyz faster then u can linger-about/
sad-and annoyance 2 my vision/fusion blown hearts 4ever crack'd still ,hate over whelmz my decision/
complete my linez and prove a point-needed/expressin feelinz,hate isn't strong enough 4 me 2 get u badly treated/
its good verse evil and evil currupts/my mind busts erupts drownz my only life i got left, its like smokin and seein thoze cigerrate butz/
overwhelmed by my own feelings surpassed blessed hatred without healings/
drop'd dead, from love ones takin my emotions, deep demotions left me soft like good lotions/
blamin me 4 there mistakes clinched fists, 2 suffer from slit wrists/
popped a bullet in my head 2 end my pain'd-life/15,slaughtered my self, cuz drove insane by a
luv'd wanted wife/

CHORUS'2

drove insane, not from pain but from emotions drain'd and nothin gain'd/
lost life and proud 2 walk through the gates of heaven/
remember my luv, 4 her left all 4 here a true blessin/
life is 2 short, 2 currupts memories, like a camara full of used film' button pushed abort/
no more 2 give, 14 end'd my day, hope ur happy cuz u drove me down-todya, i still luv ya..sry i 4got 2 say/

damn...this was a very deep peice. I liked your 1st verse alot better then the second b/c you were more consistant with what you were trying to get across. I felt what you was sayin and it was hot.....good drop, keep doin yo thang and keep yah head up. be easy, 1

yeah this was a good peice, a good read as well, your flow was pretty good, you had good vocab, you had good content as well, but overall a good peice, keep dropping.

THANX...GUYZ...

MUCH APPRECIATED*

thanx 4 the input....

again much appreciated*

UPPIN 4 SOME MORE INPUT

THANK ALL

i agree wit y not, that was a hella deep peice, i also agree wit him on the fact that i was feelin the first verse more than the second, but the whole post was fine, the vocab and wordplay were good, the flow was on target, u did a good job, keep postin man.

yo if u have the time can u hit my post up?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82558
thanx

peace.....

ight ight

thanx dawg

much appreciated it..

NE MORE INPUT WOULD B GREAT

THANX ALL..

PEACE

UPPIN 4 SOME FEEDBACK

PEACE

dep,feelin it.been there done that myself know where ur cumin from,had descent flow vocab was good,multies lacked but not really required in a peice like this,content was also good.

In peices like this it's the message the u wanna convey with heartfelt lyrics which was delivered here so props good drop dawg.

Peace

thanx..west


appreciate it...

uppin 4 a lil bit more input...

only my 2nd ever open mic.

peep it