(Short) Note Book Piece
 

.:Rainforest:.

Resamblin life,
Beautiful but still treaturous./
Silent and save,
But olso filled with danger./
Quiet, peacefull,
but al by al its still restless./
Dirty and ugly,
Filled up with controversial hate./
But still pure,
By its inner beauty./

Y'know I was going to compare this peice with my bedroom, but I figured that to be innapropriate. So I won't.

Anyway, this was a short peice indeed. It's hard to reflect on it because when one reads it they can't pick and point out their own parts they want to, there is just that which is there to reflect on.

But I read it and all I can say is you captured the rainforest pretty much down pat.

~Shalom~

:) it was short, ..but i liked it ...

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it was a decent written peice

i think THE WAY you wrote it

is what i can critque on most
the way you used teh html
by bolding adn italicing helped aid in teh structure of your peice

since it was such a simple peice it was good for you to add a higher level of vocab so that the peice really isnt SIMPLE

jsut simply written

nice peice
hazy

She So Cute^^, even in reply's :) Preciated^^

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Definately feeling this. In thought, its amazing how the rainforest ecosystem is, in evolutionary and life terms. Its silent but dangerous. I dont think humans have realised how important the rainforest is. Keep upping this shit and lengthen it.

Camarac close the other one plz


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listen here i reply to you ....you reply to me thats how it goes

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yeah i think this was a good short piece, it was good read lol, but it had meaning behind it and i was feeling it, it was structured pretty good i thought too, overall id say it was a good piece, keep up the good work.

Thnx ^^

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I don't know what to make of it....It reminds me of something i read once called the Gunslinger by Stephen King. Due to the characters own actions he has created a paradox within the world he lives in that is reverberating out of himself. This reminds of this piece. It seems as if 2 warring factions are debating over the qualities of the poems object wich is all the things that both have claimed but can still be embodied in purity. It will give me something to reflect on, as well as a style that I may try that wouldn't have otherwise crossed my mind....but that's what art is first it makes you think, then reflect, and ,most importantly, it must bring you to action of one sort of another. This piece does that in my eyes. Thank you for sharing