My latest verse on life...
 

Guitar strummer, come pluck a beat for me...
My mixing board is broke, so I ask reluctantly.
I gotta have music so yours will have to do...
But regardless of the background the lyrics will break through.

Feelin like Kid Rock, hearing strings in my head...
But the message is rap, and will be till I'm dead.
Gotta produce the words, the phrases that flow...
Need to elevate complexity past my current plateau.

See, I'm a lyrical warrior...one that can't be killed.
Cuz everytime I lose, it's just pride that's spilled.
But don't get me wrong, I ain't no one's pushover...
I may lose alot, but come weak and I'm a steamroller.
Flatten ya ass, have ya looking like a pancake...
Piss on ya verse for syrup, let ya know ya made a mistake.
Consider me a vet, or you'll pay the price, herbs...
Cuz even fellow vets have respect for my words.

But this game is just that, one to be played...
Most of the characters fake, a simple masquerade.
Just actin out, playin roles like on stage...
Comin at this adult with their teen-age rage.

Guitar strummer, come pluck a beat for me...
My mixing board is broke, so I ask reluctantly.
I gotta have music so yours will have to do...
But regardless of the background the lyrics will break through.

I'm above all the beef, I just wanna write...
Get the thoughts on paper, yellow or white.
Make ya'll believe that I'm something real...
Drop Open Mics or battles that ya'll can feel.

All this comin from a family man...
Think up rhymes, while holdin my daughter's hand.
Throw love at my lady, I'm proud she's my wife...
Embrace and protect my shit for all the days of my life.

Cuz I worked too hard to come out of the black...
Darkness used to greet me and I'd just laugh.
Was once a monster only bred to cause pain...
Ate enough of it myself so it tainted my brain.
A seething creature needing chaos and drama...
Suddenly soothed when he sees baby and mama.

Guitar strummer, come pluck a beat for me...
My mixing board is broke, so I ask reluctantly.
I gotta have music so yours will have to do...
But regardless of the background the lyrics will break through.

I hope that these words told a little story...
I hope they conveyed my mental inventory...
I hope that perhaps you can now feel my vibe...
I hope that the imagery will help describe...

My life as a man.

Guitar strummer, come pluck a beat for me...
My mixing board is broke, so I ask reluctantly.
I gotta have music so yours will have to do...
But regardless of the background the lyrics will break through.

lolol dont u hate dis, 49 views but not one person responds???

RB got lots of sleepers

neways

it was a coo drop, not OFF DA CHAIN,but coo

Simple rhyming scheme, coo lyrics, wouldnt help to up da vocab (but that aint necessary, to me thats xtras)
could have been better but it was coo'

7.5/10

Almost 50 views and only one fuckin comment?

I'll take it I've left you all speechless with awe.

Except for C-Drama...

Thanks, man.

Ya thoughts are appreciated.

Yeah this was a pretty good piece i thought, good read also, your flow was good pretty much on track the whole time, vocab was ok, your content was good as well, overall id say it was a good piece, keep dropping.

I thought this was pretty nice .. now that i kno, it was a lil basic, flowed well, scheme was good i enjoi'd it mostly.. good drop 7/10

Very nice and peaceful ballad type of drop. I liked the imagery and I was even able to hear a Kid Rock type of harmony to it. Well done. You obviously have been doing this awhile. Only critique, like the other fellow said, is your vocab. It could have been more complex, but really, I'm feeling complexity wasn't what this was about or what you wanted with this piece. You were telling a story and a nice one at that. Keep it up, but I guess you don't need me to tell you that.

Peep this verse, will you people!

Dajum ^^

Feelin like Kid Rock, hearing strings in my head...
But the message is rap, and will be till I'm dead.
Gotta produce the words, the phrases that flow...
Need to elevate complexity past my current plateau.


Nice

U'r message came clear^^combined wit a nice flow, ..good vocab...structure, ...the way of immagery, ....real nice drop :) props


Can u hit some of mine up , in open mic, ...and olso in poetry ^^Preciated

Word, Thugz...

Thanks for the feedback.

Good Job BTK...this was good flow and read and message was good...yet another dope drop form ya..8.5/10

I loved this thought it had a really good flow and i can just imagine that as a audio track maybe you could do that if you have the equipment overall 9/10 very nice I'd consider puttin this in legends

Thanks alot, WT and Kobra...

I really appreciate ya thoughts.

Kobra, thanks for thinking it might belong in Legends.

Much respect to ya both.

Shit, everyone that liked it.

Thank you.

Wow,
Very nice, I've been inactive for a while, and this is the first peice i've read since i've came back and its lettin me know that RB isnt just full of herbs, its got some talented writers, such as yourself. Very nice image, Followed your flow, simple of course, but nice use of vocab. Long, But never fell off, always on point. This would def. be a really nice peice for audio. Nice Drop

Overall Grade-9/10...nice job...


-Peace