DiverseSyndicate vs V.A. $lim
 

aight 10 lines norm rules all votes must be explained

diverse your up

no show does that mean I won .................................................. ......................

virginia slim, diverses-hymns will curse-ya-kin, send you spirilin downwards cause i dispersed-with-in//

hit-you-with-heat, rip-you-in-three, put tha slices in my oven till im fixin-to-eat, cause i strike like an egg-beater, mixin-emcees//

my verse could make you leak-from-tha-brain, now you speakin-insane, took away your intelligents, now your weak-and-your-lame//

i know you, you was smokin menthols, while you was puffin, i rendered your verse useless due-to-this install//

some small program, it turns ya verse from a battle to a slow-jam, i left you withered like a smoked-ham, u thought this was a joke-man.

DiverseSyndicate

ic ur getting better!

good luck to V.A. $lim~!hit-you-with-heat, rip-you-in-three, put tha slices in my oven till im fixin-to-eat, cause i strike like an egg-beater, mixin-emcees//

^ clever multis! LoL

~OnE!~

uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

nice rap......................
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stop freepostin ya fuckin herb, too many people are freepostin and shit,one of the mods need to do somethin bout that.uppin this battle.~1~

aight sorry it took so long last I checked you didnt post and this is the first time I have been on today so mine will be up in a few and that was a good verse I know I cant beat it but I need feedback so I can know how to up my skill so I will try anyways

can someone tell me why this bitch wants to freestyle fight me

when everyone knows his keystyle is biting

diverse I heard your a faggot sittin at home masturbating dudes

while I'm on this verse masticating you (look up masticate)

this bitch is an egg beater that beats off MC's

and cant make money from rappin so he makes it on his knees

before I kill him I will have "fun first" so diverse get on your knees and wait for my "cum squirts"

if you tell me no then youll hear my "guns burst" while I have ya momma screamin my "sons hurt"

it'll stop the way your "lungs work" then you'll be ridin in some"ones hurst"

your done now cause I just burried you under "some dirt"

Decent battle here.....breakdown

Punches: DS
personals: VA
Multi's: DS
Wordplay: None
Metas: DS
Flow: VA

Vote = DS

His punches just hit harder....VA I was wit u up until the last couple of lines

hit my battle up against lyrical cyanide
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83004

hit-you-with-heat, rip-you-in-three, put tha slices in my oven till im fixin-to-eat, cause i strike like an egg-beater, mixin-emcees//

LMAO egg beater?
witf you is crazy lol but i enjoyed that line


before I kill him I will have "fun first" so diverse get on your knees and wait for my "cum squirts"

if you tell me no then youll hear my "guns burst" while I have ya momma screamin my "sons hurt"
^ lmfao

that was weird but cum lines as we all kno have been played out since 92


but it was still funny

anyways overall im gonna go with the creativity and that came from ds

can yall break it down for me more so that I know what I have to work on and what really is good and bad cause I'm really new to this and like those last lines I thought were my best cause the multi's and the in line's but I guess that I am thinking that cause I know how hard they were for me to think up .
just looking for some advice and help thanks

Ds got dis, straight woop ass lololol

punches and everything went to Ds

vote = ds
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vs i think that its mainly the wors you use

there simple words maybe pick up a thesaurus or sit n think what other word means the same thing?
that might help you out some you kno? example:

before I kill him I will have

PRIOR to the kill

or something i dunno i mean look at my record lol but im just trying to help do me a favor and look at my battle wit hot ice ( its ridicoulous and im sorry to waste your tyme) same with DS peep as well please

aight everyone upping this shit for some more votes .................................................. ...............