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DeadlySpitta 10-01-03 10:02 PM

Untitled
 
Made To Cant Stop Wont Stop Beat

Aiyyo, I cant stop... and I wont stop
Fuck dat shit... get dat ex and pop/
Slow down bitch I dont wanna get no aids
Thats like losin $200 in a game of spades/
You'll get played... So bad that it hurts
U'll see dis nigga in a room with flirts/
Girls wit skirts and they ready to be fucked (Yea)
But... before I fuck, my dick gets sucked/
Like... Whoa... I like that there....
Cmon shorty, do it again right there/ (Cmon)
I love da way dat a chick shakes her ass (Yea...)
Then I take her to a room and I bakes her ass/ (haha)
Many men all up in tha roooom and...
We banged dis chick dat popped a shroom and.../
Its not our fault that we cant stop dis shit
I'll make every fuckin dj drop this shit/ (nigga...)
Bump dat shit... loud... Blow ur ears out...
Ima nigga dat'll fuckin flow ur ears out.../ (damn...)
I like how women go far for a nigga
But... hate it when its $400 a nigga/ (Im not payin...)
U a cheap dirt girl and I dont wanna fuck u
Dats like... askin a girl to come and suck u/ (nasty pussy...)
Switchin tha script and flippin tha tip... Girl,
Swallow tha cum, stop takin a sip... Girl.../
Its a Pimp's Night Out so stop frontin
I can fuck... and leave u wit nothin/
So try stuntin if ya want It work...
Stop Complainin Put dat ass t'work/ (Cmon)
Its a Pimp's Night Out so lets Party
Until last drop of tha Cris And Bacardi/

Yo... dont act like y'dont know
what I mean....

Pimp's do dis shit all tha time...

Y'know... haha...

DeadlySpitta 10-01-03 10:12 PM

Uppin

MonStar 10-01-03 10:45 PM

ok, flow was good, vocab was a lil basic, mutlies wernt bad, structure was good, overall it was a pretty good piece....keep dropping...

also if you ever get a chance check out my latest open mic...could use some feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81640

DeadlySpitta 10-01-03 10:46 PM

aight. Will do that for ya. Uppin.

GameTime 10-01-03 11:13 PM

finally i read a positive piece...everything is all depressing then i read this.....vocab simple...flow was good...i figured this was meant to be a party type shit since u had cant stop wont stop so thats aight...i usually hate that type of shit but i doubt u regularly do this....if u do then good luck with all that.....


feedback on this open mic
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82853

DeadlySpitta 10-01-03 11:20 PM

I dont regularly do this. I was tryina change my attitude cause i write gangsta type shit too much and i want ppl off my back about that so im tryin new shit now. Uppin. O and I'll check ur open mic out.

Mag... 10-01-03 11:39 PM

Well i i felt da party bump on this flow
and...
i bet the pimps do this stuff... do you?
anyways... some of da rhymes are simplistic and i little overdone but for the most part it feels like "progression" not "aggression"

{Peace}

DeadlySpitta 10-01-03 11:44 PM

yea. they do really lol. Thanx for tha feedback. Uppin.

DeadlySpitta 10-02-03 08:33 AM

Still uppin... quit sleepin

west 10-02-03 09:04 AM

Lol club banger type track,simplistic vocab and word choice,but had killa fdlow and i had the instrumental so i know,expressed topic well so descent drop dawg.

Peace

DeadlySpitta 10-02-03 10:44 AM

thanx for tha feedback. Uppin.


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