P@55!0n
 

Before da bright lights//
early mournins, & late nights//
Before da record began spinning//
way before even da begining//
before battle winnings//
before da deals, when it was sumpthin to feel//
before before it was considered real//
before da platinum chains//
before suv's with rims and woodgrain//
before it was even a concept in your brain//
before da studio equipment, before da seperation of da week and da gifted//
before dis sarene sound made your spirit uplifted//
before da dj called Herc even existed\\
or held a rattle//
before Run dmc's tales of battles//
before da cyphers herded together like cattle//
before all dat, before da music was called a trak//
before good trax were called phat//
before all dat, before da mic//
before anything we've eva said was considered tight//
before the first emcee even began to write//
THERE WAS ONLY DA DESIRE AND PASSION!!!!!!

^Inspired by Mos Def's converse commercial.
he did it about basketball I had to do it about Hip Hop Ya kNow
critique me !!!!

Can I get some reads, and sum critique'n ova here????
Tell me what yah think!!!!!!!!

thought the flow went well, wasn't too sure bout the structure, starting each line wit 'before' but the content was tight, so i thinx it worked ok

Yeah this was a alright piece, decent read i thought, it flowed pretty well through out the piece, your structure was alright, your content was good though, overall it was a pretty decent piece, keep dropping.

that before thing got mad repetative... lol... but to make sense of the structure I guess it was ok to put it in so many times...
I liked the little concept here... the shit flowed descently, wasn't too big on vocab though... and it was pretty short, but that was cool, cause it finished well, not like if it was cut off cause you didn't feel like writting no more... I hate those.... lol....
Pretty descent drop man...

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