My Goddess (peep)
 

Now jesus is a man, but my god is really a goddess
She's not the hottest, and accually shes quite modest
Now i never seen her in real life, with my own two eyes
But i been told stories by people, that i know dont lie
Why cry, when theres nothin in life that is worth the sorrow
Think of tomorrow, spend your time wisely, it cant be borrowed
While the land is harrowed, your mind becomes paved with stone
She shows the way to different walks of life, so i'm never home alone
She shows you the way, to get from day to day
To stray away from the cliche, and never asks you to pray
My life was in dismay, untill she helped turn it around
Got me to think deeper thoughts, rather than just follow the sound
Put my ear to the ground, got away from mainstream
Now im travelin through the tube, tryin to reach the pipe dream
And it might seem, that all my thoughts come radical
But they all make sense to me, even if they sound sporadical
Nomadical, is the way i roam around
From town to town, listenin to sound to sound
Pound for pound, im not a heavy weight at all
But im satisfied with that, bigger they are the harder they fall

jesus christ you peopole view all the other ones that have feedback already but dont peep mine when you see that i have none

This is a pretty good piece, it was a good read, it flowed pretty well through out the piece i thought, you had good vocab, your content was good also, worth the read, overall it was a good drop, keep dropping.

and if you could return some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83050

im jmust gonna upp this right now b/c its at the bottom of the page and i have 1 FUCKIN REPLY damn you people ALL sleep on everything

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This was a nice piece^^, wit a nice flow, ...the vocab u used was nice, and u structured it nice, ..it was personal , ...and the aspects of that , are real nice to read :)

Put my ear to the ground, got away from mainstream
Now im travelin through the tube, tryin to reach the pipe dream
And it might seem, that all my thoughts come radical
But they all make sense to me, even if they sound sporadical
Kinda feld this the most

real nice piece ' and try to hit other pieces up maybe they will hit urs up :)


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