''I lost you'' Please rate.
 

To make me smile he would always endeavour,
A year three months we were together,
We had something to cherish and truly treasure,
I was so convinced we were forever,
He was my eyes when I was blind,
He was so rare and hard to find,
Our thoughts combined, feelings entwined,
One body one soul one heart one mind,
He was my soldier, inspiration, motivation,
Always shoulder to shoulder, there with no hesitation,
So scarred from the past but that trust he restored,
A bond I felt would last, nothing I've experienced before,
Supporting me mentally, when lifes challenges were testing me, Im so grateful he was sent to me, he really was my destiny,
Overcoming every obstacle and emotion, I'd tell you ''I did it 4 us''
Expressing my utmost devotion, I'd reassure you ''im so committed to us''
Why can't u be here with me now, So I can show u love and affection,
Why did he above part us after we made this connection,
I want you to know how much I love you, I still care,
And when its my turn I'll come join you up there,
Theres a deep hole in my heart only u can replace, So many challenges ahead, alone I have to face,
Feeling every emotion, empty, angry, so so sad,
But they can take you but never the memories we have,
Lifes so short, and I promise you, every moment I will seize,
Knowing your with me in spirit, baby please rest in peace.

gurl you want a reply?

then give a reply

i neva see you reply to anyones shit

do some replying and then ill

hit you up

Eh Heh...that was a bit harsh wernt it??? LOL well, now, this poem was.........................................sorry, reply to mine (GOOD POINT, HAZY) its called 'The Girl At The Window' or something like that.

Okay, I've been here like 5 posts give me a damn chance!! Ha ha for real crazy. Whatever, dont rate it, its all good.

no hazy is doing whats right..if you dont reply
to hazy or any of the other people in this forum
dont take the time to post your shit like your
gods greatest gift since slice bread

me or the other moderators of this forum agree
with this...this will be deleated..closed..or edited..
if you refuse to reply for the others in this forum...

somewhat disrespectful pimpwhatever..to everyone here

thank you for your time and attention...good day now...

P.S
oh 'this was cool'...reply to others and they might say
more than 'this is cool'...you and lady divinity need to
leave if thats all your capable of typing

I believe that your style is straight forward and it shows you put emotion into it... all artists always need improvement, but I would say you are on the right track. Keep writring.