SS Verse: Starlight
 

Hmm...
I had a horrible time with this topic...
So bear with me on this one...
Better just get ready for my casket match next week...

Daylight shines... Opening our eyes to "true" light..
Yet this truth breeds hate derived from stereotypes...
Gender, sex, age... set up barriers and baracades...
Idiots in seats of power while the rest make miniimum wage...
Image is everything... Ever seen a "thugged" manager...
Equality? How so when a woman has a job handed to her...
A whole generation held back... Elders fear evolution...
Fear of new thoughts... Fear of the power they'll be losin...
Parents feeds lies... How we'll all shine for the world to see...
Then trap us in our roles.. No advancement... total hypocracy...
Seeing the truth in people... Its like our eyes and ears fail us...
In this train of life... somehow perception always derails us...
Narrow minds run our lives.. Aided by tainted eyes...
Buying into lies from what we see... Thoughts can terrorize...
Living in this light... How can we ever truly get it right?...
Maybe the answer lies in blindness... caused by intense starlight...

Like i told u b4, ..u used a nice and high vocab in here,
Ur flow, ...was nice, ...and u had some ill lines in here, ....u went off topic for a few lines , but u made that up comin better after that :)

Narrow minds run our lives.. Aided by tainted eyes...
Buying into lies from what we see... Thoughts can terrorize...

Real Nice :)

Gluck Vs G.Hod ^^

Uppin for feedback

This was a good piece

Your flow seemed very basic...I think this needs some work on...Unless i missed it...But i read it like twice...But

You had some real tight wordplay

Image is everything... Ever seen a "thugged" manager...
Equality? How so when a woman has a job handed to her...

Thats it right there...that is the shit

I thought you kept meanig behind lines with going on topic thta lil bit...< but hardly anything...

Pz...Props :)

^^^
Word

was kinda basic for the simple fact I struggled with the topic

Yep...It was pretty good.
Not really as bad as I thought it would be, and yeah the topic is hard as hell. Try Flash Floods for a topic. But anywho, Your flow was simple, yet made it easy to read, and easier to acknowledge the piece's shining points. Lots of Nice Lines in here, and some points of brilliance(not really, just trying to make you feel better)

Image is everything... Ever seen a "thugged" manager...
Equality? How so when a woman has a job handed to her...
A whole generation held back... Elders fear evolution...
Fear of new thoughts... Fear of the power they'll be losin...

^best lines because they are so true. Nice Piece, and good luck on your casket match next week ;)

^^^

Like whoa

yeah...this was dope...you had a nice stiry with the topic given...the vocab was high...but the flow was a lil' basic as stated before...but all around this was a nice drop...especially with a topic that you wasn't feelin'...

oh...by the way...can ya hit up my collab with WORD~PERFECT...it's called "What the Future Will Bring"...here'z the fuckin' link ya fuckin' fuck...lol...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83066

Uppin for feedback

it was straight, simple flow, nice vocab in there, could b better but it was a good drop

peep this open mic
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83469

Damn.. I fucked up upping the other verse...

This was the one G. Hod no showed in