Transforming Vengeance
 

I turn into John Gotti once you've got me in the hot seat,
Make you think that you got me, then turn into a nazi.
Only twice more killer than Hitler,

'cause blood's more than a filler, It's sustenance to a sinner,
the main course at my dinner, cause I am a blood spiller,
Syphon it through a filter, 'till my world's gone of kilter:
a little bit tipsy, a little over the top, see?

Now my life's topsy turvy due the master I'm serving,
His hatreds unnerving, a slow to surface disease,
A noose 'round my throat, a noose made of deceipt
It's depleting my instincts 'till it my flesh i'm eating
But no masacyst's here, I've cried canibal tears

To a chorus of cheers from inner demons I fear
Alive and well in my soul, they turn my nerve endings cold
But atleast I know it's my own, the one thing i've not sold
Despite vernacular slaughter that asks why I bother,

After seeing myself faulter in the face of the Father.
But it's the evil that's in me that composes my stature,
that Kept me just outta capture,
So I'm better than Gotti and those faggots called Nazi's,

I might be run ragged, but my enemies have not got me,
And for now that's enough, these punks think themselves tough,
But when I get back home, VENGEANCE BE ABRUPT!

heres the deal..reply to others before doing anything
in this forum..or any other forum for this website...
that is the only way you will get good replies from people

thats why im saying nothing for this...and nobody else will...

I realize that, and I apologize for now responding to a thread b4 posting my own. I have gone back and made amends for my fau paux by reading and responding to a very interesting piece by "ThugsDoCry". Peaople should check it out: "(Short) NoteBook Piece"

Raves

Oh, and plz 4give me if i do happen to occasionally drop a new post w/o responding. I use a libraries computer I don't always have very much time, but i'll make the effort.

Thnx for the props :)


Im not that good at replyin at poetry, only writin ^^

But this piece, had some aspects, i liked allot, ..the way u expressed urself was real nice, and it has more to say, than the words only, the inner message, ^^ like in allot of poetry is there and i think im feelin it :) so this is a nice piece in my opinion^^like to read more from u

Pz

thank you raves for applying the rules of this forum to
yourself for everyone else and I wasnt doing this to be
a prick...now to your poem..which I did like....

this would sound nice over a beat or without a beat
as an open mic piece in front of people..coffeehouse..
all that ish..the vocabulary was average and the delivery
was good...the way you broke it up had made it more
reader friendly to those who actually do read..well done

please reply if you have the time..you being busys understood

la paz

damn kid..i loved it....bein the evil bastard i am it was great to me....an nuthin left fa u to do bt get better so do u...stay up an breathe easy.......-shi-