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Menik 10-04-03 02:57 AM

Quick Keystyle
 
My hearts so full of emotion…got feelings colliding like tides in the ocean..
Hearts worn down from this loving erosion…but it’s the path that I chosen..
As the doors of opportunity are closen..and I gotta follow the leaders like im posen..
And im just frozen…like a river cause my lyrics just arent flowen..
And im knowen..that im gonna be giving up sooner or later cause im not blowen..
Everythings always in a mixture..binded down by this emotional fixture..
I always find myself painting a losing picture..cause ya lyrics like gold, always richer
And I seem to always be in confusion…from constantly losen..
My shit will never be moven…like a river that’s not fluent..
And I cant get my shit fusion..so I cant get my skills proven..

just a quick keystyle..leave me some feedback on it, thanks.

N.D.eva 10-04-03 07:18 AM

thouht it was an alright read, it flowed good and i liked the use of multis, but dunno about wot you were sayin.............

not bad......HOLLA

Menik 10-04-03 03:54 PM

Hey man thanks for the feedback, keep the feedback coming, its much appreciated, thanks.

Co-Faxe 10-04-03 10:01 PM

This shit flowed real nice and the multis were great. Were you comparin your self to other emcees cuz thats what i got out of it.

Just keep elevating and using the emotion and you will succeed!!

PEEP MY SHIT
~1~

Mag... 10-04-03 10:36 PM

This was good i most technical ways........i think...

What the verse really lacked was Angst or whateva... some shit to make me feel what you feel....

I didn't get bit by your emotion... it almost kinda bored me...

keep workin on it...

{Peace}

Menik 10-04-03 11:03 PM

Hey thanks for the feedback yeah i just comparing myself cause i got bored, but keep the feedback coming, its much appreciated, thanks.


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