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HOT ICE 10-04-03 08:27 AM

Believe
 
You know you can "acheive"
So why not "believe"
I know it may "decieve"
But you were ment to "recieve"

Your staring at all your "dreams"
But all you hear are "screams"
Trying to drown out all the "teams"
Pushing you self to "extremes"

Glory is at your "door"
But first you must go through the "war"
Once you get there you will "soar"
and people will see what you stand "for"


Just a lill something id share
*HOT ICE

THE DOPED MALB 10-04-03 12:45 PM

i like the possitive message in this
4 me it was a little 2 simple
even though it works how it is
seemed very short due to it been simple
basic rhyming scheme contributes to that

keep posting

K-Dubb 10-04-03 05:35 PM

I feel you on that one Ice, to me it was very nice. Nice little short poem. Last 4 lines means a lot to people, or it should anyway.

Menik 10-04-03 05:50 PM

Yeah i agree this was a good piece, it made a good read, it flowed pretty well through out the piece, it had a good meaning i coud relate too, and your content was good, overall it was a good piece, keep up the good work.


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