Sons of Man
 

Sons of man never understand,
Sons of man with the time in our hands ,
We're the sons of man endin the road lyin in the sand,
We're the sons of man and we in control of all the land

If I could do one thing in life, I would preach till I die/,
And wonder why a son of a man would make his mother cry,/
I remember stayin out late at night not callin you mother and the tears sheddin down your eyes/'
You knew from the beginning these streets weren't nothin but the devil in disguise/
You would try to send me places to seek help and space/
But all I would do was learn to try and find a route to escape/
I thought you didnt care but only if I realized you were tryin to help/
Maybe If my father was here we wouldnt of gone through all this mess its like my life's on the shelf/

Sons of man never understand,
Sons of man with the time in our hands ,
We're the sons of man endin the road lyin in the sand,
We're the sons of man and we in control of all the land

Dear Lord I'm havin nightmares within these dreams/
Constant sweats and heart pulsating screams/
Father I just dreamed that I was shot down last night/
In front of an imaginary son a daughter and my wife/
Lord if this is my future how can I change this way/
Cause my meaning of life isnt meant to be this way/
My mistakes mental errors and sins rolled into one/
My lord you never realized to gain control all I need is a gun/
Take the 9mm Beretta and point it right to my head/
Brains splatter the wall BOOM BOOM jus another street example dead/
But why do you keep me livin servin you on this earth/
Puttin nothin but temptation and pain in my heart since birth/

Sons of man never understand,
Sons of man with the time in our hands ,
We're the sons of man endin the road lyin in the sand,
We're the sons of man and we in control of all the land

I'm a son of a man with death in his hands,
Whether I choose to use it is not in God's plan/
I could resort to silence but you cant trust the silent/
I could resort to violence but you cant respect violence/
I could resort to murder one click and theres death/
Or I could resort to suicide, standin by for my last breath/
God you say everyone on this earth is my brother/
Then I must be dead cause all my brothers are undercovers/
Doin righteous wrong and vice verse/
Only future plans is my last ride in the hearse/
Depression, Obsession and that nasty word HATE,
Fills my soul a hole a dangerous sign of fate/
Sons of Man hold your breath and walk with me/
Talk with me tell me who you often see/
Is it angelic or Evil, Does it enlighten or decieve you/
How does the world read you/
Legal or ILL-egal/
No matter what our past feeds you/
stand up and be equal/
Sons of man our fathers who stayed will love us till they die/
Sons of others will perish into God's eyes/
My brother Charles you were a son of man/
Untill a still-birth gave you no decision but to take God's Hand/
Now you play the role of two lives accompaying me in my cross/
So now you watch over me and try to make me realize my life was not a loss/
But we all come from somewhere in God's land/
Thats why I rep to the fullest that I'm a Sons of Man/

Sons of man never understand,
Sons of man with the time in our hands ,
We're the sons of man endin the road lyin in the sand,
We're the sons of man and we in control of all the land

That was hard to read, to put it simply. I couldn't see a flow to it. Though it's structured there's no wordplay, metis or multies. I would suggest making it easier to read, put a flow to it. And use more wordplay, metis and multies to make your drops more interesting to read.

This was the shit. It was awesome. I loved the read and I couldn't have done any better. i may be new to the site but I know when soemthing is good. I respect the topic and I believw that you can only do better. Excellent drop. Keep elevatin!

Since your so good you should read my two items and tell me what you think. i'm new so keep that in mind But again AWESOME DROP!

PHEW OK I see where your coming from but a few times I did get lost in what you was saying. Try keeping your lines even instead of just writing a lot of what was said was drugged out.

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Yeah this was a alright piece, it was a pretty good read, it flowed alright through out the piece fell off at times i thought, your vocab was pretty good, content was good too, overall it was a pretty good piece, keep dropping.

its okay, not too shabby tho

7/10