FREESTYLE (feed back appreicated)
 

yo my nigga dont come at me like you hard give yo pussy a shave/
im gonna make like dmx and jet-li and cradle you to your grave/

dont try to hate me nigga haters just get off my dick/
befo i leave you broke and in a splint like a bootleg mike vick/

nigga i know you on my nuts with me you have a fasination/
get on my bad side and ill be standin over you at yo assassination/

tryin to battle me is just stupid simply put its not smart/
ill leave you empty handed like you got caught tryin to steal from k-mart/

like mcdonalds i love to see bitches smile ive been doin this for awhile/
this is my last bar i am done wit my lil freestyle/

please give me some feedback on this. dont sleep

not bad, just seems a little slow. You kind of deliver it the same though. Good ideas though

it was alright.. your lines were very simple and you need more word play and try not to end freestyles with this is my last line so im done.. its just a big ass filler.. its alrigght you got some potential just keep on slanging.. but u need to elevate a bit first ..

thanks for the feedback my niggas. holla

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