jus SHUT UP
 

i aint posted a thread ina while i bin elavating a bit.. tell me wot ya think..

Fucked up knee, mucked up boots and ma hands r shakee
Chunking like a druggie whiteys, thinking I bin dinking too much lately/
So maybe I should quit why I can n let lose, fix ma liver from all dis abuse/
I use to not give a fuck n I still don’t, telling ma self ima get rich im still broke/
Forcing ma self to take another sip but I still choke, I aint mad that ima joke/
Yo turn it up a bit till I feel dis shit, we gon get crunk till we construct the limits/
A modern product of sugar mixes dohnut dips and vodka sips/
Jus possibly dis bitch has gone crazy, n you cant take my stupidity from me/
But every argument I have its occurred, I walk wit concealed words

only if I could say what I wanna say,
and if I stayed instead of walking away/
you wouldn’t look at me tha way you do and see through,
u wouldn’t talk about me the way you do : we wouldn’t have these issues/
coz I would of said a few true things that would fo stunned you
you don’t really care bout ma view you jus wan me to become you

just shut up and let me speak before I fall week
and sink into tha thoughts u might think

This was pretty good..Liked the flow and style...keep it up...

peAce

aight cheers fo tha reply
peace ~roX~

Yeah this was a pretty good piece...it made a good read...you had a catchy title lol so i thought i would check it out...it flowed pretty well i thought...the structure was pretty good too..i like the way you opened to it and ended it...overall it was a good piece, keep at it.