~The Devils PlayGround~
 

Surrounded by darkness Runnin' along with images of the heartless
Stories written but plotless Impossible for souls to be spotless
Talkless Or no maybe Im juss outta breath weezin'
Tryin' my best to hold my sneeze in Wishin' I didn't believe in
This season Eternal flames Everlastin' elements of pain
Skies rain flames Sendin' devilish epics toward the brain
Im prayin' Sayin' to God My thoughts in prayer Im scared to speak
Goin' for the long shot What? I can't hear Im empaired Im weak
This lair is deep Fell in it a while ago And never stopped fallin'
I used to cry out for help No one answered I stopped callin'
Heart stallin' Skippin' a beat Maybe outta excitement More likely fear
This burden I don't wanna bear But fucc it Im already here
Or there Wherever Im at I juss wish I could run away
From my dreams But without nightmares It take the fun away
But hey Im not complainin' Well then again yes I am
See the stress in my hand? Don't push me to get over it Im tryin' the best I can
But this wasn't the plan Hit and run games Satans playin' with me
Im outnumbered by devilish angels That shatter my hopes swiftly
Runnin' quickly But every door opens to another long journey
Im yearing to extinguish these flames Im tired of burning
Tossin' and turning Cuz everywhere I look I see Lucifer's image
Sayin' he won't let me out easily But Im feelin' too hopeless to win it
I finally cross the line to the finish Filled with faith I seem to win
But tears are spilled when I get up and awake to the same dream again

Uppin' real quick before I bounce...

Uppin cuz this is gettin' slept on like a mutha...Peace

i thought that was a tight post dude. i was feelin the structure and internal rhymes, along wit the wordplay and vocab. the content and topic were both original, and overall i thought that was a pretty damn good post, keep droppin man, that was tight.

peace......

really liked this piece man
imagery was really good...u turned a played topic into something different and a unique portrayal of your story
some sandout lines as well....
flow was solid thruout...all complimented each other well
and sme of the sentences were worded perfectly

'Skies rain flames Sendin' devilish epics toward the brain
I used to cry out for help No one answered I stopped callin'
dope..

really well constructed piece...the ender was class as well
props

This was nice...

Imagery was on point...

Flow was aight...

Nice vocab...
And you brought out a story really well

Nice

very, very nice. I'm speechless

I wonder if ^he actually read it...LoL...THanks for the replies everyone...

But hey Im not complainin' Well then again yes I am
See the stress in my hand? Don't push me to get over it Im tryin' the best I can

^^^ Shit Was Tight, Personal . . .
The Whole Piece Flowed Nice . . .
Your Rhyme Scheme Followed
Through Evenly, From Bar To Bar . . .
Nice Imagery, And You Even Had
Some Alliteration Here And There,
If It Was Intended Or Not, It Was
Nice ! ! :)

This was DOPE... this is one of the best reads for me in a while... your flow reminds me of Aesop Rock... the imagry is almost there too... there were some fuckin DOPE lines in there too

This lair is deep Fell in it a while ago And never stopped fallin'
I used to cry out for help No one answered I stopped callin'
^^^My favorite line

keep up the dopeness... you gotta represent the name
us "Mental's" have to keep it ill here on rb... you are livin up to your name... peep soem of my shit... tell me if i am too

Nah it wasn't intended...And I still don't see wat you talkin' about...

And thanks for the replies again...Uppin...Peace

This season Eternal flames Everlastin' elements of pain

^^^Thats One Example . . .
Please Return The Favor And Peep My Open Mic

Word...LoL...Nah It didn't even realize that ish...Peace

i used to play in the devils play ground
and battle niggers and they got clownd
but now im too busy for that cuz im a man
and i be too busy repping da Klan
im the illest white rapper since Bubba Sparxxx
i attack like great white sharks
Eminem is wack, he should be black
call me Bubba SparKKK, wit da electric attack

^Shut the fucc up...