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Romulus 10-06-03 03:27 PM

-Something Near The Bottem-TDC and Mic Collab
 
Topic:Something Near The Bottom

ThugzDoCry
Emptyness, feelin lonely, pain inside drives me mad, ..
the time is gone the time so fine i once had.

Complex, inner struggles , feelins i cant explain,
i was so close, so close to for that thing to gain
Circomstances, drove me to feelins i was forgotten,
confusion inside that made me come nearley to the bottem.
Prayin, when the day starts till the end of the late night,
askin for somthing, ..simalar to satisfy feelins from inside.
Was once so fragile, evaluated to somting strong,real or fake?,
but still destroyed, makes me wonder why real feelins can easily break.
And turn in, wonderfull joy , in somthing thats so dirty and rotten,
turning, u wit u'r head in the sky, to nearly the bottem.



Micatic
When Something Inportant falls....Where Does it Land
When That Thing Hits Rock Bottom...Were Does it Stand
Can Life Collaps...Is It Possible From One Fault Or One Problem
Do Thoughts Have To Be Empty To Be Some Were Near The Bottom
1 Fault Or 1 Problem Is It Possible That It Leads To A Continunce Of Downs
When U Hit Rock Bottom And Lost All Hope Are U Left Face Down In The Ground
Or Is It When Life Is At It's Lowest...All Dark...And No Sounds ..Is That It
Did God Plan Everones Life...When U Hit Bottom...Was It Bound To Happen
Is Half Way..Still Considerd Bottom...Or Do U Have To Fall Under Bottommost
Is There A Chance Of Regaining Life...or When u Hit Bottom Is It Lost With Hope
Whats Truly Hitting Bottom..Lieing,Cheating,Or As If U Sold Ur Soul To The Devil
Whats Hitting Bottem Really..Or Is There Even Bottem..Or Just A Bunch Of Diffrent Levels

-Magnitude 10-06-03 03:34 PM

Not bad fam, some decent imagery in there, really work on evening out your lines & some more internals for both of you. Keep writing, thats why ur with us, good work!

.ExXoDuS. 10-06-03 03:34 PM

Dope Collab.............I Was Feelin This Topic.......Good Complexity From Both.....Also, Ya'll Stayed On Topic.......Structure Was Decent.........Not A Bad Piece At All.....Good Job.....



Dope. PzZz.

Edicius 10-06-03 03:41 PM

Yup it was quik keystyle^^

Some things coulda worked out better is see now, ...but,it was personal, so i figured, the aspects by its self dun need the other things, but still its nice :)

ILLunatic 10-06-03 03:58 PM

Tight Shit..........
Nice Collab.......
Next Time......
Get ILLUNATIC In On It...

Edicius 10-06-03 05:07 PM

Thnx ^preciated^

MicAdicT 10-06-03 07:17 PM

Ya foreal
I do shit liek dis all da
time..
Goo shit
fellin da plot
Pretty decent stuff compared to sum of da rest
pc
holla when this goes down again tHog

Romulus 10-06-03 08:41 PM

thanks for all the feebeack

^ do i know u or something....or do u know me

anyways keep uping on feedback

Edicius 10-07-03 08:47 AM

^^Up

Romulus 10-08-03 05:52 PM

keep upin on this...this is a allright open mic...more feeback please..

Edicius 10-23-03 09:40 AM

Up^


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