Another Open Mic
 

hook:

We Approach This World With a New Set Of Fears
Another Instance To Shed Painful Tears
We Take For Granted The World Abroad
Running From Faith And Worshipping A New God

I Don't Understand What's Happening To Me
It Struck Me So Sudden, So Blindly
Thought I had The World Solved
All of Sudden My Life Evolved
Open Pandora's Box Full Of Treasures
Needed A Plan to Take Emergency Measures
No One Seemed To Have Any Answers
Every Step Taken Seemed Like More Hazards
It Seems I Keep Runnin In Circles Countiously
I'm Out Of Breath and On My Knees
What Must I Do To Achieve Hapiness
Life Is One Colossal Holy Mess
I May Be Taking Giant Steps Towards a Solution
But Realistically I'm Only Crawling to Evolution
What Does Life Have Planned For This Individual
Will It Be Seemingly Happy of Extremely Painful

We Approach This World With a New Set Of Fears
Another Instance To Shed Painful Tears
We Take For Granted The World Abroad
Running From Faith And Worshipping A New God

I Have Come To a Fork In The Road
I am Stuck In Defensive Mode
Which Direction shall I take
Another Important Decision To Consider and Make
Not Knowing The Consequences Embrace Pleasure and Fear
I Could Lose The People That Are So Dear
Do I Take The Simplistic Way Out and Let Loose
Purchase a Rope and Create a Noose
People Devote Their Life To Study The Brain
Can Someone Tell Me How I Endure This Pain
This is Supposed To Be The Funnest Part of My Life
But Why Must I Continue To Burden A Difficult Strife
If I Fall Who Will Be There To Help Me To My Feet
Who Will Step Forward And Vacate Their Back Row Seat

We Approach This World With a New Set Of Fears
Another Instance To Shed Painful Tears
We Take For Granted The World Abroad
Running From Faith And Worshipping A New God

These Values and Morals Of Life Are Mutated
The Wholesome Ways Have Been Permanetly Castrated
Respect and Loyalty Are Considered Unheard
It's Like What We Say Is Completely Obsurd
We Are Looked Upon The Bearers Of No Responsibility
We Are Society's Sterotyped Liability
You Wonder Why We Even Have Rights
We Have Independant Thoughts and Internal Fights
Just Like Any Mature Adult Living Today
Teenagers Have An Impact And Political Say
We Are The Voices of Tomorrow
It Shall Be Joyous Not Sorrow
You Don't Help Us When We Fall
Why Do You Expect Us to Help At All

We Approach This World With a New Set Of Fears
Another Instance To Shed Painful Tears
We Take For Granted The World Abroad
Running From Faith And Worshipping A New God

This was an aight piece. Flow seemed a little off and vocab in the first verse was weak but you got stronger towards the end so keep elevating and ryming.

PEEP MY SHIT -

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84039

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yo it did get weak toward the end but it was ok...
improve it by usin beta vocab an multies....
yo keep droppin...
...peace...

Yeah i agree...this was alright...flow did fall off towards the end a bit...The hook was pretty good i thought...but your vocab could be a little better...and try using more internals for the flow..but it was a good piece..keep at it..and keep dropping.

and if you could return some feedback.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84048

this wasn't a bad piece at all...flow lack in some spots but overall it was good...7.5/10...seen better..keep droppin...