New start? *Notebook Piece*
 

*NoteBook Piece


New Start?

Couldnt imagine, the inpact of invisible scars,
disguised as hurricanes in inner wars.
Drugs abusin, savage of every kind,
junkies, givin birth to crack-babys born blind.
People facin, situations they cant figure,
seein no way out only by usin the trigger.
Politicians, corrupt spreadin vicious lies,
hope bein spread by the devil in disguise.
Dirty statements,lighten strength in peoples heart,
but down inside i know we never gettin a new start.

This is a piece from a few years ago, i was joung, and some real shit happend^ its kinda simple, ....but i wanted to share it, ....feedback plz.

What a shame^^ Feed back would be nice

ayo i like it. it was a good topic it flowed easily....nice drop homie

can u feedback http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=84088

Great Piece first of all your words and the way you tell your personal feelings of the world shows great imagery...
This makes your piece not only deep but very personal...

I think you could have extended it though...

Yup, my views on the world ^^ when i was 16 are blazin ! lol^

Thnx for the feedbak^

This Was Dope...
Flow Was Short and Sweet, but it helped Exaggerate more on the Message.
It was Nice, and even though you were sixteen, It Showed What Type of Artist You evolved From, Which Is Dope.
Good Shit.

That touched me, ....^


Preciated

ok was short but sweet,good expression and alot of issues i feel strongly about myself were well portrayed here.

Peace

Means allot to me, ....glad yall liked it ^

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it was short but very concious
i like it more poetic then rap song though so it gets bettr thought