The beast inside
 

i keep jottin down thoughts, as they flow thru my brain\
when the beast inside wants to come out, i cant keep him restrained\
fair warning to all, go out my way when im raged\
like im captive in my own mind, my body be my cage\
i drink an smoke, to try to get rid of my curse\
but most the time it dont help, just makes it all worse\
start the hallucinations, and i lose my self in my dreams\
constantly wankin from my slumber at night, always followed by screams\
sometimes its like im standing back, watchin someone else take the toll\
seperation of my body and mind, then i have no self controll\
im not accountable for my actions, when whatever i lose myself\
cause its not like i have my mind, its like my head sits on the shelf\
while my body goes around, raises hell with the world outside\
my problems seem to reflect the story of dr. jeckyl and mr. hyde\

SON THIS WAS HOT !!!!!!SHORT I USUALLY AVOID SMALL READS BUT YOU FAM SO I GAVE IT A SERIOUS LOOK AND THIS WAS GOOD YOU DISPLAY YOUR GIFT WELL

i was feeling it, good spit ya had a good flow to it and good runon flow----ya kept the imagery well too---i just think the mutlis' and flow culd of been more more complete nice for a keystyle...0oneo0

im not big on multies... if you peep my other stuff i dont usually have alot of them... its just not the way i flow... i duno

loookin for some more feedback

ok, flow was on point, structure was good, vocab was good, content, again good....i was feeling it, deff a hot drop...nothing bad to say about it...i'm gonna have to peep more of your stuff...keep dropping...

o yea if you get a chance could you peep my latest open mic..always looking for some feedback....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83967

all doe it waz short it waz gud


go give me sum feed bak on mine