. .Day Drifter. .
 

. .Day Drifter. .

Mind Emerging Into A World Of Wonderous Theme`s;
Where Reality Is Fake & The Real, Lies In My Dreams.
Eyes Are Keen, Twenty Four Seven I See The Unseen;
Remain To Believe - Wrongs Were Made For Redeem.
& Continue To Drift Into This Place To Focus My Mind;
To Feel The True Emotion, Words One Of A Pure Kind.
Thoughts Can Rewind, Bring Back The Time With Rhymes;
I Can Imagine The Perfect & Create My Fitting Designs.
Pure As Air, Scents Of Sweet Carrode & Abstruct Lives;
The Ones Who Take There Own - To Make Others Cry.
Pressure Crushes, To Show You Cant Forever Rely;
Resouces Die, Thats When People Start The End to Lie.
Ellegant Features - Peace, Visions & True Creatures;
Hell Burns In Its Own Fire, Set With Death & its Teachers.
Knowing There`s Wrong When Life Takes Its Breather;
& Continues Its Exhaust & Pays A Cost For The Cheaper.
World Taken For Granted, No One Decides To Consider;
That This Place Is An Imagination Of A True Day Drifter!

Damn Brother, this was a dope piece, ...u used some mad vocab in here, ....and it was well structured, wit a nice flow,...

Where Reality Is Fake & The Real, Lies In My Dreams.
Eyes Are Keen, Twenty Four Seven I See The Unseen;
Remain To Believe - Wrongs Were Made For Redeem.
& Continue To Drift Into This Place To Focus My Mind;
To Feel The True Emotion, Words One Of A Pure Kind.

Really nuttin more to sasy bout this,
This was real nice ^, i enjoyed this piece, ...lets collab?....pm me k?....

Props.

Pure As Air

^^ Wasn't feeling that at all]

But the rest i was feeling immensly...Dope drop

You had a solid scheme throughtout with some tight vocab that followed through with some enjoyable content too read

Stay Up :)

Uppin for some feedback .

^ What he said

i would have to say that it was a nice drop, good line control to help it flow together a lot better...whoah, my minds stuck on rhymes...lol

altogether, real nice piece keep droppin...

Uppin

^ Yeah Yeah

damn, them too lines are pretty sick, you flow perfectly, but the creativity lacked I think, althought -



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nice verse dawg, very nice structure, dope vocab.. what more can i say..... ill keep bringen wit dem verses.... u gots mad potential :)

keep it real,
pz

ayo 1 more thing, watch for some shit i be spitten soon, used to be rapdis.com, now im here 5 months l8a.... so not a rook, just a lil rusty so dont be a h8a.

pz out