Air Raid On Biting Herbs
 

ill heads combine cooridnate flight patterns and rise
Basic maneuvers soar as high as we care 2 visualize
Terror cells multiply rapidly The Omens is the host
I'm taggin open mic with an O sedate heads w/ a dose
In automatic wrath mode no apologies on out behalf
U chose a tragic path road so we sacrifice u like calf
For treating rhymes like buffet lines thats how beef starts
Tell me why all of our pieces are full of your teeth marks
Pierce your skin with spit darts for some acupuncture therapy
Haters couldn't fly a plane and crash our structure apparantly
Zero damage percentage despite efforts to shut us down
The Omens remain and declare we're stronger than ever now
Shape shift apply arts of war tactics for ripping text battles
Put u in a sticky mess your stuck like u slipped in wet gravel
This is The Omens air raid all u herbs better yield way
We armed to bomb on biters and we're having a field day

P.S.
I welcome your two cents as long as you can be honest
And this here is not a mattress please don't sleep on this....

wow, not bad, kinda nice, good drop here girl

keep em coming

and ayo, peep da sig

nice drop, flow was there, vocab was good, structure and mutlies where good...i was feelin it...keep droppin

^Thanks for the feedback. uppin^

This was bad flow wise, topic wasnt very original in my opinion, nothing really quoteable or stood out as dope, you atte,mpted wordplay in there, internals and multi's were there but basic, you need to have more to spice it up, flow was probably its strongest aspect to this, transistion was decent, i just wish you'd write something more challenging with deep emotion / imagery etc, these kinda topics get tired after a while.

Not bad though, you have potential.

Holla - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84440

^^^I'm getting there Cam, thanks for the feedback. Much appreciated. :)