Round 2...Verse 1, Feedback
 

it's unbelievable how many people see me as evil/
n march towards me to keep me locked away in a steeple/
they melt tha key to tha cell...now people/
leave me alone, can u not see tha evil/
that be at home when Kobe's in tha zone/
and u hear a physchopath on tha phone/
if u know wat i mean, i'm not green/
i've been part of tha scene way befo 2003/
rolled around n decided to do a 360/
to have my fans not want to listen to me/
i also got peeps like Jacob dissin me, but listen G/
all ur lyrical rhythms seem to be missin me/
it's simple ain't it? when ur layin dead/
under tha war banner n ur drenched in red/
and i'm holdin ur decapitated head in my hands/
hold a ban if ur not a fan, but first, get off my land, <click click> UNDERSTAND?/
i won't autograph my autobiography/
for u ebay users who wanna make a prophit off of me/
stop tha mockin me, hatin me but copyin me/
hopin ur stoppin me from droppin a hot CD/
croppin a lot of beef to start poppin a lot of G's/
don't try to stop this MC...especially cause i'm high off tha coffee/
let's go wit lattes and feminist destroyed chop shops/
tha new million man march holds guns, gats n glocks...pop pop!/

....> Eh.....Was Alrite.......

FLow Was Good....Your Rhyming Sheme Was Real Common...
Up Your Vocab <..........







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you kinda used a style like Eminems...(good style to use)
this topic was ok, and you had a decent amount of visual.
Just use good vocabulary... I've seen your other spits, and
their better than this one... just keep droppin....
A.T.-

yea, my otha pieces have been a lot better, i don't know wat's happened to me, i think i'm workin too much...

ok, flow wasnt bad, vocab could use work, structure was good, maybe could have used more mulites....overall it wasnt bad but it was kinda simple....keep droppin...

if you get a chance could you check out my latest open mic and leave me some feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83967