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Adrenaline Rush 10-09-03 12:53 PM

I think I have Teret Syndrome
 
Yo yo yo man,I see that yo name is Stan/
Well do you like to stand?.why not yo name is Stan../
You fuckers wanna get mad and start cursin/
Yall just jealous cause my neice and my daughter the same person/
Oh no,I hurt my neck and my back/
I got sore spine,I think its because I got a heavy nutsack/
And its Hairy,just like the witch,what bitch/
I'll slap you for being a snitch,put you in a ditch/
Everybody lets get wild like whoa...look at the camera ..smile/
Who's the illest rapper of all time ...Lil Bow Wow/
Bounce with me bitch..bounce..bounce..I aid bounce you asshole!!/
Whoops look out for that pothole...you almost..I would have laughed/
Hey..do you like to be a crocadile?..whoever made that up/
Is stupid as fuck...what?..I'll kill whoever whose standin/
I bring the end..like my name was brandon/
get it?..do you get?..oh well..hey..I saw you in hell!!/
Get off my dick..Im to dope/
If you swallow my cum..you might overdose/
Bitch...oh shit...I mean..I have to ake a shit/
Well..I'm gone..and I wont be back/
I got beat by Tu Centz...you know I'm wack/

chorus:
Yo if you're readin this chorus you must be retarted/
Got nothin else to do..oops.I think I just farted/
Damn..it's time for me to be home/
Please dont laugh:( I have teret syndrome/

I'll prolly get banned for a second verse/
Ouch oh my god..my neck it hurts/
You bastards dont appreciate real art/
Shh..be quiet....FART!!!/
Hey that kid look like Bart/
Not Simpsons...I'm talkin about OJ.../
Not the murderer..I'm talkin about orange juice/
I'll killed the granny from Dont Be A Menace To South Central While Drinking Your Juice In The Hood..I now have the juice/
whoa^^^ that was a line ...it was longer than minority mothers tryin to get welfare/
I dont care..I used to have a funky fresh fro..but I cut my hair../
Peace goodbye Resse I smell feet..oh never mind..thats my teeth/

Adrenaline Rush 10-10-03 12:59 PM

lmao can I get sme response on this this peice..I put alot of work into it..lol..

Mr.Christensen 10-10-03 02:04 PM

the work is evident...good drop kid
flow wasnt bad just not great in my eyes
wordplay and metas were pretty good... you can def use more
vocab was pretty decent... word choice was good!!
overall its good but i kinda expected more from you :(

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84636

e.coli 10-10-03 02:10 PM

yeah this was a pretty nice piece. i felt the vocab could have been upped just a lil bit and just get a few more metas in yo piece.

good drop nigga
holla at yo boi
~1~

gotaloveforrap 10-10-03 04:23 PM

aight homie i thought that was a pretty good post. ur vocab could definetely have been elevated more i thought, but other than that, i thought ur flow was ok, but ur wordplay and multis were good. overall that wasnt a bad post, keep droppin and elevatin homie.

peace......

Menik 10-10-03 08:56 PM

Yeah i agree....this was a pretty good drop...it flowed alright through out it, got off at some points i thought...vocab could be better too...content was pretty good too...wordplay was pretty nice...overall it was a nice drop...keep at it and keep dropping.

and if you could leave some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84642

yog_dogg 10-11-03 12:57 AM

yeah same here nice drop and the flow was good overall it was good keep doin yo thing

Adrenaline Rush 10-11-03 02:38 AM

lmao..yall think this is ill 4 real?..lol..okay if yall say so..lets get some more replies...


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