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Judgements (NoteBook Piece)
Judgements
Elevation,..... of juviniles realeased on probation, set back in society,hopefully without humiliation. The judge of sick minds,yea he's ready for rehabilitation, who is a suit,..to tell me im ready.. for the confrontation. When u so far gone,.. u cant judge,... ur own.. actions, who are people that 'educated' to convict ur reactions?. Do they know.... whats it like?,.. the feelings inside, do the know that ur life, contains,pain, makin u hide. Knowin whats best for u,..... without leadin one minute of ur life, decidin,this is best for u,close ur file,goin back to their kids&wife. They cant judge, the way u actin y u do it,what it makes u to do it without sence........ im sick and tired, of people ,thinkin they know it wit their analyses,and fake judgements. |
Very cool, my man...
Very cool. I totally relate to and feel what ya sayin. Being told by some fuckin judge what's up. Who the fuck is he? What kinda shit is that? This topic has always been a sore point for me and you hit the shit right on the money with ya verse. Short, simple, and to the point. Not alot of imagery given, but didn't need it. Used my own memories for that. Great vocab, real nice flow. You laid low with the wordplay and metas as well... Just making a straight forward statement that came across the way it should have. Peep this and you might get a bit of an idea why I relate... I dug it up today... It's the first piece I ever dropped here I think. My 1st verse (Maybe you'll think it's Legend worthy) Peace |
Shame on the sleepin, thnx for the feedback Btk, preciated
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WHO SLEEPIN ON YOU SON?
YO THIS WAS A GREAT PEACE I ENJOYED THE READ NO DOUBT... AL0OT OF THIS REMINDS OF WHEN I CAME UP FOR PROBATION. |
That was dope man.....u stayed on point leck whoa..!!
i was really feeling it....."The judge of sick minds,yea he's ready for rehabilitation, who is a suit,..to tell me im ready.. for the confrontation." ^^^ Dopness..1!! I really like it...peace |
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Dope Piece Ed
You are one of the Open Mic kings on this site...........nice topic.........good flow......felt the piece Good Work |
good shit, good shit.............................................. .............very different and it had a great use of vocab..........
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Taktik *Whipes tear from eye
Preciate the feed back^ |
it's an okay drop, simple rhyme scheme, good concept tho
keep dropping man 1 peep ma open mic [url=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=84427]The Struggle[/ulrl] |
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Your vocab is so so tight.. Its better than alot of cats on here and you speak dutch.. Respect and props to that :)
Your flow and imagery was high to match that..A shorter peice than usual but I ain't complaining.. Short and Sweet Def Improvement!! |
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